Player Comments on Tick Tock Goes the Clock

To begin, you kinda stole your plot from Doctor Who. Hell, you even reference the correct episode in the storygame as well.

And, what a coincidence that you happened to (SPOILER ALERT START) shoot an automaton, and then the very same one came back and killed you (SPOILER ALERT END) Not very imaginative.

I think you may have some skill in writing, but you must refine it first, and a good way to do that is to not steal plots from other franchises. Do something ORIGINAL. It can be hard, but I'd much prefer to see an underdeveloped original story, than a rewrite of another pre-existing story (*cough* Warrior Cats *cough* *cough*).

3/8. Hopefully, you take this as constructive criticism (I'm hard on people, I know), because you have potential. But this doesn't cut it.

There are a lot of problems, firstly, the amount of times you said tick-toc was just annoying. secondly it's so short its over in an instant and there is no way in heck you are getting me to read until I get all of the endings. This story has potential, but until you fix all of the bugs, It's crap. One example of a bug would be that there are a few spelling errors, and the "paragraphs" are not formatted correctly. And after all that it's good, For you to poop on. and rub that tick toc toilet paper through your ass.

This is just lazy writing. Someone watched a doctor who episode, flushed the script down the toilet, pulled its tattered remnants out of a sewer and slapped it together into a story on the site.

Also, I’ve never watched a doctor who episode so I had no idea what was going on due to the utter lack of explanation. There is no branching or imagination you just die in jail which the author never explains how you got there.

If you’re going to write a fan fiction, do it while not relying on people to know what you are talking about and without directly referring to the source material. My brain hurts from reading this so I’m just leaving it at that.

I like the whole, constant, "Tick tock, tick tock" thing. It created an eerie atmosphere. Unfortunately the atmosphere was ruined by all the Doctor Who references.

I am thinking about using an infinity gauntlet.

Really cool game

Creepy...

Very one directional, most choices simply led back to the same choice. Many grammatical errors, and a largely unoriginal plot.

Not really a story game. Seems more like a demo and the author is just practising.

You really need to proof read your work. I think you have some writing talent, however you need to think of an original plot flesh it out more

TOO MUCH DOCTER WHO

Isn't this a Doctor Who fanfic? It certainly feels that way, you've referenced several monsters from the series. I don't feel that you stole the plot, but it literally uses things from the Doctor Who fanfic. All you need to do is state that the protag is an OC of yours and you'd be done.

Needed another ending

Aww, I died. . .

Sort of well written but I hate the illusion of choice

This is pretty good, other than the fact that you took most of the plot from Doctor Who. However, I seriously love that show, and it definitely brung back some great memories. Thanks for making this great game!

Your choices only make the game longer or shorter

the story is mysterious which i like but i wish there was an explanation. i think the tick tock sound is just a countdown to the characters death

Non-existant plot, complete linearity, and very crappy police.

1/8.

How is this 4/8? Had almost no storyline or plot and the "Tick tock"s were incredibly irritating.

Erm... Apart from the possible breach of copyright, the very psychadelic storyline and the somewhat unattentive police, I suppose that was... Interesting.

What dick police xD

You certainly know how to make a prologue to a story, this was not a prologue. This was the story. It wasn't enough for me, I was reading a script, without a pen to edit the script.

6/8?

Kerr-eepy! But great! I loved the cliffhanger!

What I liked about the story: It had a good plot. Also, it had a rather humorous tone that suggests some realistic views about the character. Also, it had a rather impresive use of the editor. However, you will want to be carefull with your spelling. This is not to say that your spelling is not good, merely that you should be more carefull when writing your storygames. This is my opinion, and so, some people may disagree with me.

Well... Unexpected ending.

Better! * Looks around suspiciously for Meadow*

Wow, is all I have to say about this. I like the cliffhanger, although it could be a little more developed and longer but other than that it was great.

It's alright. could be a little longer.

Let the record show I had basically NO PART in creating this game what so ever. All I did was tell Meadow how bad it would be if it were to be published; and it was published... :L

i think it was good but you should finish it before you publish it but thats just some advice

Good cliffhanger!

Okay, it was good...a very intriguing plot. But it was not complete. I did like the suspense and the random (yet well placed) Doctor Who reference. 6/8

"Ps. If you hated this game so far, please don't rate it. Or comment, for that matter."
Really?

I was frightened. And who actually contributed to this game? It was pretty good, and the writing was well written. I just think that you should end the story and not leave us players hanging.