Player Comments on You Feel Me (Prologue)

Thanks for the all the comments. By the end of this moth, I will have this part of the story extended and re-edited.

As Chris said: Parts are never good for anyone. You should actually finish the story before you publish it, and if you want feedback before then, you should put it in sneak peek mode and post a link in the forums.

Very suspenseful, and a good effort to try and develop that abusive, heartbeating scene. However- and this may just be me -but I felt as if it were a little repetitive. Anyways, good job. You have potential :3

Don't split your story into parts.

Not content with parts new authors are now splitting their stories into prologues :D That's my only criticism, the writing here is phenomenal and hugely enjoyable, the story draws you in and makes you interested and I only wish it was longer. I think it will be difficult to maintain this high level of quality through a full-length story and I'm not sure where you will take the story from here, this seems like a stand-alone piece of writing rather than a story to me. Switching to culinary metaphors I'd describe this as a starter, now I'm really keen to see what the main course, the story itself, is like :D

Not bad. But please do not divide your story like this. It would have been way better if it was longer and if the font was the same all throughout.

There shouldn't be any blank pages in a completed story...

Aww, it ended! I was just starting to get into this game. This was actually looking like a pretty good game- I recommend you add much more on to it, as well, and also perhaps have your experience with the cat influence your memories... anyhow, this was a pretty good game. The cons were the font changes and short length. 5/8. This has a lot of potential!

Worth reading, but would be better if:

-Text did not change
-Was not that short, this was enjoyable but a slight bit disappointing
-Add Prologue to the other chapters for one long story

3/8