Avery_Moore, The Expert Scrivener

Member Since

1/8/2019

Last Activity

9/20/2019 5:18 PM

EXP Points

2,615

Post Count

776

Storygame Count

1

Duel Stats

213 wins / 95 losses

Order

Notorious Marauder Exemplar

Commendations

137

I went to the zoo yesterday, but they only had one animal there, and that was just a dog... It was a shih tzu. ^_^

Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Earning 2,000 Points Having 1 Storygame(s) Featured Won 70% of Duels Given by BerkaZerka on 04/07/2019 - ^v^ Given by EndMaster on 04/26/2019 - For defeating the CoGite Tyrant in personal battle to gain your FREEDOM!

Storygames

Featured Story The Price of Freedom: Innocence Lost

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You are ten years old when you first feel the weight of shackles around your wrists. In a matter of hours, your whole world is turned upside down as you and your brother are dragged away from your home in Greece to work as slaves in the Roman Empire. Now you must struggle for survival. Every decision you make will affect your future. Your life, the life of your brother and the lives of your friends are in your hands.

Begin your journey as a child, and make heartbreaking choices that will shape the adult you will become. But be careful. An act of kindness might come back to haunt you, and a thoughtless word could earn you some powerful enemies. A split second decision will determine who lives and who dies. Will you sell your soul to win your freedom, or sacrifice everything for the people you love? Will you even live long enough to see the sun rise?

Special thanks to all of my beta-testers: TinyOnion, Morgan R, Mewsly, Evan Dean Nathanael, Laha, Cookiemonsta, Jumo, Hannah Minger, Danielle L-S, eXwhYZee, Umbreonpanda, M.S.X.K. Laird, Likho and N1GHTMAR3.

And a really, REALLY special thanks to my patreons: Chanbot, Mizal, Ryan Esher and SpartacustheGreat.

All of my games are free to play, but you can support me on patreon at:
https://www.patreon.com/Avery_Moore

You can also keep up to date on my games by following me on social media at:
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https://twitter.com/Avery__Moore


Gotta Catch Em All
unpublished

Pokemon game for playing around with variables and stuff


Gotta Catch Em All (Original)
unpublished

Pokemon game for playing around with variables and stuff


The Lawless Ones
unpublished

This game has lots of stuff.


The Price of Freedom: Brothers in Arms
unpublished

Blah, blah, blah, description. ^_^


Recent Posts

CYS Book Club: Book Six on 9/20/2019 8:25:06 AM

Oh yeah! Sorry, I forgot. :(


CYS Book Club: Book Six on 9/20/2019 4:58:34 AM

Oh yeah, definitely. Jster02 is clearly a very competent writer. If he can come up with a stor this good in a month, I'd love to see what he could do in a year. ^_^


CYS Book Club: Book Six on 9/19/2019 2:55:29 PM

All done, and here's my review:

That game was kinda cute. Such a weird little premise for a story to wake up and find yourself in a world where everybody is made of paper-mache. Kind of put me in mind of Gulliver’s Travels a little, being a giant in a world of little people.

The writing was very good, only noticed a couple of spelling and grammar mistakes. But I think my favourite part about this game was that, even at the very end, I can’t really tell whether I made the right choices or not… I mean… You can save the world from an evil tyrant… But put a guy who thinks it’s okay to kidnap and do experiments on little children in charge instead. Alternatively, you can betray the creepy child experiment guy… But then the kingdom’s still ruled by an evil tyrant. Either way, the poor little paper-mache people are fucked… I really like that. It’s much more fun than a choice where one option is clearly evil and the other is clearly good. If a game can make me look at the screen and think for a few seconds before I actually make my choice, then that gets bonus points from me.

Now, to what I found kind of disappointing about this game… Well… The people are made of paper-mache. That would be really interesting except… Well… That’s all. That’s like… What the whole game revolves around. Everything else about the world is normal. It has trees and animals and stuff. The only difference between this world and our own is that… You know… People made of paper-mache. I do love stories that are intentionally weird and supernatural, but the weirdness kind of has to be consistent. For instance, stories like Alice in Wonderland, The Wizard of Oz, Peter Pan and The Chronicles of Narnia, all have a million and one different things about their worlds that make them so weird and magical. This world has… Well… People made of paper-mache. While a great start, I think there kind of needs to be more to it. If a world has talking animals, living inanimate objects, potions that make you grow or shrink, unbirthday parties and riddles with no answers, you think to yourself, “This world is a really weird and interesting place.” If the world has people made of paper-mache, you think to yourself, “Why the hell is everyone here made of paper-mache.” … What’s more, you think, “Why the hell aren’t the animals made of paper-mache?” I mean, if there was any explanation, like the whole world is one big art project made by a child, that’d be okay, but since there never is any explanation on where you are or why you’re there… Well… It just leaves me wishing that the world had more weird stuff in it.

All in all though, it was an enjoyable read. And considering it was a contest entry that only gave you a month to finish it, I’d say you did a pretty great job.


Tally Ho, Chapter Two on 9/18/2019 4:33:55 AM

Option 1, sir... And you know, if you REALLY want the lady back, there's only one surefire way to go about it... Get her a ruby the size of a tangerine! ^_^


Tally Ho, Chapter Two on 9/17/2019 5:38:53 PM

Option 1, sir. I have several years of experience in removing unseemly stains... The amount of guano I had to wash off Master Bruce's batsuit... I shudder to recall it.


Tally Ho, Chapter Two on 9/17/2019 4:10:33 PM

Option 2! Maybe we can turn Haze into Batman instead! (I hear there's a lesbian one of those flying around CW network somewhere.) ^_^


CYS Book Club: Book Six on 9/17/2019 11:15:07 AM

Ah, my bad. >.<


CYS Book Club: Book Six on 9/17/2019 8:27:13 AM

Play length 6/8, so a week should be fine... And think I'm going to give The Quick Dating Game a read right now. ^_^


Tally Ho, Chapter Two on 9/17/2019 6:46:24 AM

More likely a persuasion check... We're screwed. >.<


Tally Ho, Chapter Two on 9/17/2019 5:25:21 AM

Oh, the woes of being a retarded butler... Option 1, I suppose. I won't make a fool of myself further by trying to bluff my way into first class with the I.Q. of Forest Gump.