Warning: More story than game. Be sure to save.

You are a Mage. The use of magica is forbidden in the land and all Mageborn are put to death at birth. Luckily for you, you were spared by your parents, the King and Queen who could not bear to kill such a beautiful child.

The evil Sorceress Virmina from beyond The Veil, has sensed your growing power and seeks to recruit you into her army of rogue sorcerers. Will you give in to the pull of unlimited power, or fight the witch and her thralls to keep the peace of a kingdom that rejects you?

Thanks.

That was great, It reminds me of my dad who died when I was 10. He killed himself though. He was an asshole, but my mom is no angel either. She is still alive and kicking. I want to join the Eridial Knights! Can't wait until it is finished.

Thanks for the read. Did you mean the indentation or spacing where there is a character talking?

Great Thanks! :)

I'm so gonna' play that lol. Did my link work? Can you preview it without me publishing it?

So, this is my first story/game ever. I want to know if it is worth continuing or if it needs some changes. So far I have the first page and two links (the links have a sentence to let me know where to take the page) and just want some feedback.

I assume that I just post a link here but not sure if it will work unless I publish the unfinished game.

http://chooseyourstory.com/story/viewer/default.aspx?StoryId=18193