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The spelling, grammar and all that is just fine, and the concept behind it is just fine (if not exactly the most riveting stuff) but it was so, so short.
As a children's game about health I could think of other scenarios more important to cover than whether or not mommy drives you to the doctor, too. Basic stuff like hand washing or not sharing drinks, or how to clean a cut or scrape and put on a bandaid, for instance.
Posted by http://chooseyourstory.com/Member/?Username=mizal
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This is great for young kids. It shows responsibility and the consequences of our our actions. It is short enough to keep a kids attention, but not so short that it's boring. Plus, it uses realist examples. They only change that I would make is that when he s/he see's the girl being bullied, there should be a "tell an adult" option (assuming a trust worthy adult is around. Sometimes, going up to a bully is not the best option, as you could get hurt. Of course, standing up for someone is good, so it's a fine line.
I would love to use this with the kids I babysit, and I think they would have fun.
posted by http://chooseyourstory.com/Member/?Username=Ryndragonmaster