Didn't know if you'd want us to reply here or there but here I go. Your story is lacking, and it makes me question the logic of how it starts. If there are gunmen shooting up the building that I'm on, and I'm on an upper floor, how would no one know that this was happening? Did these guys take the elevator and somehow were never seen? I know there guns aren't silenced if I can here them when I play dead.
Anyway, you need to include items into the story. I chose to bring the broom, and when prompted I decided to use the bleach that I didn't have. I even used a gun despite the fact that I chose to sneak past, thus never having acquired it. Simply putting, "(if you have it)" won't stop anyone from choosing the option anyway.
I honestly wanted to just bash the story :p. However, you seem to actually be looking to improve it so...yeah.
P.S. Next time you are asking about something related to making your story, it belongs it Writing Workshop.
