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Game Description

Your team is part of a secret organization deep within the government. Your team was trained to be the best, make the best decisions, and always succeed. Your team put their lives in danger for the citizens of the State, and completed many successful missions.

Now the CIA is uprooting the organization. Forcing allegations of conspiracy and treason on your organization. You need to escape from their hold, and work to find out who is behind all of this.

You get to control a total of four characters throughout this story.

 Introduction (First Page)

What is the Team?
The Team is a secret organization deep within the government. Outside the Team itself, only a handful of people know of its existence.

What do they do?
The Team was trained to be the best, make the best decisions, and always succeed. The Team has put their lives in danger for its people, and have completed many successful missions that the regular military could not, or would not be able to do.

The problem.
After returning from a mission, the Team and its commander learn that they are being investigated by the Central Intelligence Agency. Forcing allegations of conspiracy and treason on this organization. 

Your job.
The CIA cannot win this affair, as the men of the Team are innocent and vital to the country. The Team needs to escape from their hold, and work to find out who is behind all the allegations.

The Team Information.
The Team is comprised of four soldiers and one commander. You will play as a each of the five characters throughout the story.

The five members are:

Ryan Smith
Taylor Johnson
Diego Sanchez
Joseph Harris

Each colour and font signifies which point of view the player is playing from. At the beginning, the player is introduced to all of the characters, and there are many switches, however, afterwards, perspectives remain constant for long periods of time before changing. Also, the name of the character is also displayed at the top of each page.

Alright guys, what do you think about this? It is currently being done in the classic editor and i have just finished the introduction-start off-foundation part of it... the CYOA side of it is not like, kick the guy, drive down a certain road, but in fact you make bigger decisions that follow a story. I dont know if that made much sense, but if u wanna see whats done already, i can make u a coauthor...

"The five members are:

Ryan Smith
Taylor Johnson
Diego Sanchez
Joseph Harris"

And the mysterious invisible fifth member?

by the way, action sequences will be read, and you can choose what you do sometimes, but it wont be like "Aim at the guy on the left", "Aim at the guy on the right". It will be, Use your pistol, outrun them... blah blah... cuz its not in the adv editor...

Howbout for a game name:

Covert Distrust

Currently, as you know, i have a few stories going at once, well, for the intro, you get to pick who you want to start off as, well, this is what happens:

If Guy #1 startoff then -> go through his intro -> after his intro, go through guy#2 intro
If Guy #2 starts off then -> go through his intro -> after his intro, go through guy #1 intro

Now, thats all fine because if you went through guy#1, eventually you play through guy #2 and vice versa, but the question that i have is, after youve gone through both intro's is it alright if you see these links at the end of the intro page for guy #1:

If you have gone through both intros, continue to the rest of the story
Read Guy #2's intro

and at the end of the intro pages for guy #2, it has these links:

If you have gone through both intros, continue to the rest of the story
Ready Guy #1's intro

is that alright?

Well, this game will be published eventually, i promise you that. I am not going to give up on this game.

Currently i am 45 pages in or so, the intro Harris is complete, the intro for Sanchez and Smith is ALMOST complete, and when you finish one intro, there is a link to read the other characters intro, and then it will say, if you have read both intros, continue by clicking here...

also, although 45 pages is not much, i have a lot of description on almost every single page... so that is also the reason why it is taking me so long to write...

Oh, I didn't see the part about classic editor before.

On a side note, Zero Pain is absolutely the coolest title I've heard in a long time. 

Ah, I didn't even see that part of your profile about thinking of changing the name.  I didn't even read what the game was about.  I just saw the title in the thread above (and thought "damn if that doesn't sound like the kind of kickass action game for PS3 or Xbox360 at which I absolutely suck."  Or possibly a metal band.  Either way, it's f****** sweet.)