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Cryptids

5 years ago

Some of you know I've been writing a story called Cryptids, and you may be wondering what it's about. Here's a summary about what it's all about.

For a family vacation, your parents have decided to take you to a campground thirteen hours away called Oakley's Campground. When you get there, it isn't actually that bad. There's a girl named Trina Oakley (The wardens daughter) who helps you out. There's also many places to go. Like, Nessie Lake, Ahool Forest, Flatwoods and others. But there are downsides. Your brother is always getting you into trouble, which is not good. Sadly, that's the least of your worries. Everybody here talks about cryptids. Cryptids are a creature from a myth or legend said to be real. That's what you've heard. And you don't actually know if they're real. So, while waiting on a log, you see a giant cryptid, staring at you with red eyes. They're real, you think. At that moment you realize this isn't going to be a fun vacation.

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Cryptids

5 years ago
Do you have a particular creature in mind? 'You see a cryptid' is incredibly vague, you may as well have 'you see a mammal'.

Otherwise this is fine as the description of a story, but there's not a lot to comment on without more idea of the actual plot.