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A Day in Hell

This story revolves around Matt, a man living under the yoke of his female roommate. I'd suggest killing anyone that annoys you, but do what you have to. You will only be able to leave comments if you reach one of the endings. I had to do this, as many people with IQs less than 90 were giving this story 1's. Thanks! v 1.0 Published story, 2003. v 2.0 Updated some things, fixed a broken link, added a bit of content, probably created discrepancies. Enjoy.

Mommy, Can I Go Out and Kill Tonight?

Background: You were a good boy. But then you turned bad. Drug addict, cop-killer, manipulator; These are all names you could be called. But Leon helped you hide the evidence, and you were never caught for your crimes. You, who were once so far gone yourself, now help others. You take care of them when no one else will. And yet that creature who first strayed from the path of righteousness has not disappeared. It is still part of you, a dark psychosis threatening to get out. You sometimes hear its voice at night, whispering while you try to fall asleep. An eternal battle between the dark and the light rages within your mind. To which side will you listen during this most crucial of days? Features: This is an advanced game where you create a character, choosing four of seven unique traits and distributing 100 points between your three stats however you see fit. These stats and traits make for a different experience every time you adventure through the story. Stats have a direct effect on how useful each trait is in various situations, so choose a wise combination! The back-end is extremely complex, with nearly one hundred variables and over thirty unique scripts which track and update your progress, viewable on your character sheet. This sheet lists and keeps track of accomplishments you have made throughout the story, as well as updating your health, score, and any information you might find. The story also boasts twenty-one items, most useable in more ways than one, and over twenty-five distinct endings, each crowning the player with a unique title, although only three allow completion of the story. Every item's graphic has been put through Photoshop, and photos have been placed strategically throughout the 400 pages and 600 links to augment the setting, realism, and mood. Readers will rarely be prompted to use an item; rather, they will have to reason and analyze to determine the appropriate point at which to do so. Finally, if a particular reader gains special accomplishments, they will be in bold on the character sheet, and that reader will gain extra points! Try to get 1000! I took out an earlier ending which would result in around 400 points, because it was simply to soon to end the story. I may put it in after a while. Good luck, and enjoy! CAVEAT: This story contains graphic violence, sexual images, adult situations, and drug use. If you are too young to handle this sort of thing, please do not read the story. *Although I have extensively tested the story, due to the complexity of the scripts and variables, there are bound to be errors and typos. Please PM me if you find any, rather than mentioning them in comments.

Shadowline: Worlds at War

unpublished , coauthor

"Even in the modern age, the shadow of annihilation threatens to sweep over us. Now, a line has been drawn, and if humanity values its survival, it will defend that line with every ouch of courage it can muster." You are Lieutenant Jordan Weir, a soldier for Earth in the War Between the Worlds. There are two possible storylines, both epic and action packed. While there is no way to die and all choices lead to completion, your choices will change how the story unfolds, so don't be afraid of picking what you would actually do.

Want to write a story with another author? Need someone to edit or test your creation? Co-Authoring may be for you. This article details what to expect when choosing to add a co-author or become one yourself.

There is a ranking system in place! If you are new to chooseyourstory.com, I suggest you first read Fleshnblood_78's article entitled, "What are EXP points?" before continuing with this article.

Thanks, Jeff. If they'd actually implemented the IP tracking I could go to their house and brutally murder them, but they never did. I guess that's good, though, as I prefer freedom to prison. It might be fun to show up and bitch slap them, though.

You got stuck? Please send me the exact problem, I've never heard of that bug. I can fix it if you tell me exactly where it happened. Strange, I tested it a lot, too. It used to piss me off that people purposely rated 1's and what not, which is why I took the story down several times, but now I don't care so much. It is definitely a hallmark that it's been an 8 since 2006 and recently went down to a 7. I'm not sure how that happened. There are still only 15 1's, obviously the mark of an asshole, but no other changes that I noticed.

Great job and good luck! Ah, to be 18 with your future in front of you! Nice. Here are some tips: 1) Relax and have fun 2) Don't have too much fun I suspect you won't have any problems and don't need any tips. I do recall there are a lot of people who sit around smoking weed constantly and skip classes, but that was in the 90s, so I have no idea if that's true anymore. I'm actually considering going back to med school but haven't decided. Prolly UCLA or Stanford but we'll see. Do well man!

Damn, I must have been busy, I didn't see this thread until just now. Thanks triple-J, that is very cool of you. We each have our own path and yours has been very strong. I appreciate the idea that from my one measly story you said those nice things and I'm glad I was helpful along that path. I'll have to reciprocate and say that watching one such as yourself journey along, improving all the time, was inspiring. Reminding me that "teachers" are actually students, or they're not very good teachers. Strong, strong work man.

Triple-J doesn't necessarily have "best" user or highest-rated game, as such a thing doesn't really exist, but he is certainly the most noticeable presence on the site with multiple stories which are all top-notch and top-rated with good reason, and his contributions throughout the years supercede anyone else's, in my opinion. I'm not sure why you would use the words "I'm surprised." Length of time on the site doesn't mean that much. I've been here forever, god knows what my profile says, but have contributed far less in terms of writing, help files, posts, and scripting.

No one is allowed to steal "failure to fuck," versus "failure to thrive," because it's all mine. :P

"Fragile vomitorium of a brain." That's now officially stolen for the book I'm messing about with. Or screenplay. Both.

Oh, and guys, you remember the old adage: "Don't feed the trolls." Evidently they get off on it. I never understand why, and I deal with psych for a living. Well, perhaps I understand why. See above post. It has something to do with failure to fuck.

I wish there was a lock function. I'd delete this as a mod but you guys seem to be having fun so I won't. I have never been able to comprehend the first post of this thread. You see it everywhere on forums. Maybe it's because I was already, hmm, perhaps 23 or so by the time there were forums - granted, there were bulletin boards with this type of crap - but not even via telnet, until I was 21 or so. By then I suppose people had matured. I imagine that if I ever had a child, bog forbid, he wouldn't be like this. I wonder if his parents whip his legs each night with wet noodles as he sits in his cramped room, his massively obese bulk shuddering and twitching over the glowing screen, fat fingers tapping furiously at the keys as he blindly reaches for a 2 liter of Coca-Cola and a packet of powdered cheese, muttering and chuckling to himself with what he perceives as clever banter, then later crying himself to sleep, alone. If I was young like this (I hope he's young) I would probably just beat off and go to bed.

Very cool bro, rock on. If I was your age, I'd say immediately damage neurons with as much THC as possible in Amsterdam.

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