Player Rating6.79/8

"#21 overall, #1 for 2015"
based on 1014 ratings since 12/23/2015
played 24,071 times (finished 843)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length7/8

"It keeps going and going"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

Take control of General Achilles, a human General trying to lead the human fleet to prosperity through politics and military means, while dealing with keeping humanity and it's allies together, dealing with a barbaric race of raiders and a powerful alien alliance. Will humanity crush it's enemies under it's boots? Will you form a peaceful coalition between all species? Or will you become humanity's downfall?

This is my first game, which I made with the help of Steve24833. I really hope you enjoy it. Please comment on any bugs, mistakes or other screw-ups I made. 

Hey, the sequel's here, Achilles II: The Chykri. Enjoy it!

Player Comments

I thought it was good. I actually skipped the first few pages, but eventually got more into it. I got an ending that involved peace with the Alliance and unifying the Galaxy. I'd like to think it's one of the better endings, haha.

Issues I had:
- I think you should have used items for the info dump on the first page. I'm sure some of it could have come in handy later, but right away it was too intimidating to bother reading.
- There were several times I had two choices that were worded the exact same way, but had different results.
- I never really was able to quantify what my strength actually meant. I know it refers to combat strength, but we never learn what our opponent's is, so there's not much value in knowing the number.
- The game was long, which is nice, but it seemed to be pretty linear is regards to where it went.
- I was fine with the "Problem -> Solution -> Repeat", method of playing the game for the most part, but when the war happened I would have preferred to be a little more proactive. I was never given the chance to do assassinations or spy, or learn what was happening from behind us. Despite us losing many resources, we just kind of ignored it.

All in all I enjoyed it. It has flaws, but it accomplishes what it sets out to do, so it's a solid 6/8.
-- Killa_Robot on 5/20/2015 4:14:26 PM with a score of 50
Okay, first off: this storygame is such a welcome relief from the huge pile of short, uninteresting games that have come out lately. It's well-written, the scripts and variables all work (as far as I could tell) and it all makes sense as one coherent package, including multiple chapters released together, instead of multiple truncated attempts at a game (which has become far too common).
Glowing compliments aside, the one aspect you could definitely improve on for next time is the transitions. the first chapter especially seemed like each page was totally disconnected from the next. A problem was posed, I picked a solution, the results were displayed, and suddenly a totally new problem was happening. Give me a story or something to drive me through the 1st chapter; by the time the 2nd and 3rd chapters came around, the game moved forward with a clear sense of overall purpose and direction. (although it was a little slow at times). The statistics drove a decent portion of the game, but it's the characters that make it come alive--and we don't deal too much with the characters in the first chapter. Once I stated getting a feel for who everyone was, though, everything started flowing much more nicely.
As a final compliment, your knowledge of Greek mythology is awesome. I loved all the references during the military upgrades selection (what were those Valkyries doing there, anyway?) the mythology added a little flavor to the game, and I appreciated it for that.

All in all, a great storygame, and I'm definitely looking forward to #2!
-- MagmaArmor0 on 5/18/2015 10:43:49 PM with a score of 45
It was really fun, but slightly lacking on character development
-- EvanT on 6/20/2019 6:21:51 PM with a score of 50
Dang this was good, but there were some issues. The dialogue was lacking and there was no attachment to the characters because they were all kinda dull. But I was able to look past that because that obviously wasn’t the main focus of the story, and actually made it somewhat more tolerable because character development would’ve made it way longer than it already was. One glaring issue though is that I wasn’t even able to finish it! I got to a part on the planet Romulus during the surprise inspection. On the page where the guy was showing the light infantry, there was no link to another page. I tried refreshing and going back a few pages and then back to that page, but I still couldn’t continue. Very disappointing, but I can understand that with so many paths in such a long story you might overlook something like that. 6/8.
-- Peebis on 5/27/2019 9:24:38 PM with a score of 0
This story is pretty good, I feel that it had just enough depth to maintain enjoyment without drowning me in lore. The only issue I have is that other than the Nightmare seen and the Assassination, Achilles doesn't really interact with the action. I know he is a general, but I think that having him be in at least one engagement might have helped build his character through potential actions he might take. I also feel like it was to easy to balance the relationships. Other than that I really enjoyed the story and look forward reading more.
-- Uncle Dukey on 4/13/2019 10:26:51 PM with a score of 50
It's a long one, but a very good game read ! I'm so excited, I suddenly feel like I can be a good military leader now lol
-- Kuro on 3/10/2019 2:05:14 PM with a score of 50
I like the setting and world-building, but the story can feel rushed, with little to no transition between decisions.
-- pcantrell1988 on 1/29/2019 10:30:24 AM with a score of 50
-- Schicken on 1/25/2019 6:43:43 PM with a score of 0
I can't wait to go through and do the worst decisions!
-- Wierd on 12/25/2018 9:03:44 PM with a score of 0
Now as much as i enjoy this choose your own adventure there are some paths that lead to blank screens where i have no next options, specifically the military ones if you allow the tribal lizard guys to join you when you're given the opportunity to visit them. Please fix because i'd like it if i would have been able to see that path through.
-- Unequalboot3013 on 12/22/2018 11:34:50 PM with a score of 0
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