Player Rating0/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on ratings since 12/23/2015
played 9,036 times (finished 442)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length7/8

"It keeps going and going"

Maturity Level6/8

"i'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

Take control of General Achilles, a human General trying to lead the human fleet to prosperity through politics and military means, while dealing with keeping humanity and it's allies together, dealing with a barbaric race of raiders and a powerful alien alliance. Will humanity crush it's enemies under it's boots? Will you form a peaceful coalition between all species? Or will you become humanity's downfall?

This is my first game, which I made with the help of Steve24833. I really hope you enjoy it. Please comment on any bugs, mistakes or other screw-ups I made. 

Hey, the sequel's here, Achilles II: The Chykri. Enjoy it!

Player Comments

I thought it was good. I actually skipped the first few pages, but eventually got more into it. I got an ending that involved peace with the Alliance and unifying the Galaxy. I'd like to think it's one of the better endings, haha.

Issues I had:
- I think you should have used items for the info dump on the first page. I'm sure some of it could have come in handy later, but right away it was too intimidating to bother reading.
- There were several times I had two choices that were worded the exact same way, but had different results.
- I never really was able to quantify what my strength actually meant. I know it refers to combat strength, but we never learn what our opponent's is, so there's not much value in knowing the number.
- The game was long, which is nice, but it seemed to be pretty linear is regards to where it went.
- I was fine with the "Problem -> Solution -> Repeat", method of playing the game for the most part, but when the war happened I would have preferred to be a little more proactive. I was never given the chance to do assassinations or spy, or learn what was happening from behind us. Despite us losing many resources, we just kind of ignored it.

All in all I enjoyed it. It has flaws, but it accomplishes what it sets out to do, so it's a solid 6/8.
-- Killa_Robot on 5/20/2015 4:14:26 PM with a score of 50
Okay, first off: this storygame is such a welcome relief from the huge pile of short, uninteresting games that have come out lately. It's well-written, the scripts and variables all work (as far as I could tell) and it all makes sense as one coherent package, including multiple chapters released together, instead of multiple truncated attempts at a game (which has become far too common).
Glowing compliments aside, the one aspect you could definitely improve on for next time is the transitions. the first chapter especially seemed like each page was totally disconnected from the next. A problem was posed, I picked a solution, the results were displayed, and suddenly a totally new problem was happening. Give me a story or something to drive me through the 1st chapter; by the time the 2nd and 3rd chapters came around, the game moved forward with a clear sense of overall purpose and direction. (although it was a little slow at times). The statistics drove a decent portion of the game, but it's the characters that make it come alive--and we don't deal too much with the characters in the first chapter. Once I stated getting a feel for who everyone was, though, everything started flowing much more nicely.
As a final compliment, your knowledge of Greek mythology is awesome. I loved all the references during the military upgrades selection (what were those Valkyries doing there, anyway?) the mythology added a little flavor to the game, and I appreciated it for that.

All in all, a great storygame, and I'm definitely looking forward to #2!
-- MagmaArmor0 on 5/18/2015 10:43:49 PM with a score of 45
-- Anonymous on 1/12/2017 7:28:49 AM with a score of 0
How you gonna end it like that!
-- Dreldoryn on 1/8/2017 5:00:50 PM with a score of 50
This was an incredible play! The alien species were incredibly detailed and varied, the technology fascinating, and the decisions complex enough that I enjoyed even the most mundane choices. I'll definitely be playing the sequel!
-- pickapebble on 1/6/2017 11:23:46 PM with a score of 0
I really DO hope for a part 2,because I hate cliffhangers!
-- hristoskof on 1/4/2017 8:44:59 PM with a score of 50
First online, browser roleplay I've ever completed and enjoyed. Only problem is there re many grammatical errors that made following the story difficult, esp. toward the end. Thank you for the fun!
-- Quorrah on 12/14/2016 7:45:13 PM with a score of 50
I enjoyed this. I find it very well thought out, and even what seemed the better options still had consequences. Very good. I strongly recommend it.
-- Dorksmith1992 on 12/9/2016 9:25:31 PM with a score of 50
This was a great story. I tried to behave like a Starfleet captain. Always looking for peace and unity. I was upset that I was not able to prevent the war and so many people died however I was glad with the end result.
-- uan on 12/8/2016 2:06:37 PM with a score of 0
A truly enthralling story that provides a great amount of though provoking content that leaves you debating between siding with ones own race or supporting the coalition. Tryly 8/8
-- Lowlang on 12/4/2016 2:24:18 AM with a score of 0
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