Player Rating6.76/8

"#22 overall, #1 for 2015"
based on 956 ratings since 12/23/2015
played 20,057 times (finished 771)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length7/8

"It keeps going and going"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

Take control of General Achilles, a human General trying to lead the human fleet to prosperity through politics and military means, while dealing with keeping humanity and it's allies together, dealing with a barbaric race of raiders and a powerful alien alliance. Will humanity crush it's enemies under it's boots? Will you form a peaceful coalition between all species? Or will you become humanity's downfall?

This is my first game, which I made with the help of Steve24833. I really hope you enjoy it. Please comment on any bugs, mistakes or other screw-ups I made. 

Hey, the sequel's here, Achilles II: The Chykri. Enjoy it!

Player Comments

I thought it was good. I actually skipped the first few pages, but eventually got more into it. I got an ending that involved peace with the Alliance and unifying the Galaxy. I'd like to think it's one of the better endings, haha.

Issues I had:
- I think you should have used items for the info dump on the first page. I'm sure some of it could have come in handy later, but right away it was too intimidating to bother reading.
- There were several times I had two choices that were worded the exact same way, but had different results.
- I never really was able to quantify what my strength actually meant. I know it refers to combat strength, but we never learn what our opponent's is, so there's not much value in knowing the number.
- The game was long, which is nice, but it seemed to be pretty linear is regards to where it went.
- I was fine with the "Problem -> Solution -> Repeat", method of playing the game for the most part, but when the war happened I would have preferred to be a little more proactive. I was never given the chance to do assassinations or spy, or learn what was happening from behind us. Despite us losing many resources, we just kind of ignored it.

All in all I enjoyed it. It has flaws, but it accomplishes what it sets out to do, so it's a solid 6/8.
-- Killa_Robot on 5/20/2015 4:14:26 PM with a score of 50
Okay, first off: this storygame is such a welcome relief from the huge pile of short, uninteresting games that have come out lately. It's well-written, the scripts and variables all work (as far as I could tell) and it all makes sense as one coherent package, including multiple chapters released together, instead of multiple truncated attempts at a game (which has become far too common).
Glowing compliments aside, the one aspect you could definitely improve on for next time is the transitions. the first chapter especially seemed like each page was totally disconnected from the next. A problem was posed, I picked a solution, the results were displayed, and suddenly a totally new problem was happening. Give me a story or something to drive me through the 1st chapter; by the time the 2nd and 3rd chapters came around, the game moved forward with a clear sense of overall purpose and direction. (although it was a little slow at times). The statistics drove a decent portion of the game, but it's the characters that make it come alive--and we don't deal too much with the characters in the first chapter. Once I stated getting a feel for who everyone was, though, everything started flowing much more nicely.
As a final compliment, your knowledge of Greek mythology is awesome. I loved all the references during the military upgrades selection (what were those Valkyries doing there, anyway?) the mythology added a little flavor to the game, and I appreciated it for that.

All in all, a great storygame, and I'm definitely looking forward to #2!
-- MagmaArmor0 on 5/18/2015 10:43:49 PM with a score of 45
Destroyed the alliance. If it was longer it could be a good experience
-- SantosGabriel77 on 12/7/2018 8:25:16 PM with a score of 50
Epic sci-fi based story. I did however see a lot of grammatical errors that could have easily been fixed and still can with a little time.
-- CaptainPierce on 12/2/2018 9:15:44 PM with a score of 50
Brilliant. The world you created is superb.
-- Dante on 11/5/2018 1:34:07 PM with a score of 50
-- RamDanny on 10/10/2018 9:11:00 AM with a score of 50
I loved this my eyes are killing me cause i wanted to finish it but im going to replay it today or tommorow to try to get a better ending.
-- icon717 on 10/5/2018 11:20:03 AM with a score of 50
Very well written and an interesting story. I believe it is also an accurate representation of a real life version of this. Well done!
-- William5738 on 8/6/2018 6:37:51 AM with a score of 0
Besides some obvious typos, the main problem is it is boring. There is a whole part when one gets to pick all the military gear, then another where one has all the gear explained again, without any choices to make.
-- R on 8/2/2018 8:17:44 AM with a score of 50
I really liked the game great work the game was completely amazing I was so hyped while playing it and it is 5:24 am right now lol gonna play the second part anyway :p
-- KingArslan on 7/14/2018 11:24:48 PM with a score of 50
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