Eliel

Player Rating2.51/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 12 ratings since
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Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length1/8

"Make sure not to blink"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

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This is the Talia's story, you must be courageous to accomplish this fabulous quest, if not ... run you fools ! :D

Player Comments

Okay, this was better than expected actually. Needs a Geared for Children tag, and next time try making it longer and using more detail. When something important or interesting happens, show it, don't just briefly tell us about it. We get welcomed to the city, there's a lot of emotion? Why not show Kitsune hugging and thanking us while her family cries with happiness, that sort of thing? Write the things that are happening, that's what keeps a reader captivated and imagining it all along with you.

Anyway, congrats on understanding that whole 'grammar' thing and being smarter than your classmates. I'm guessing you read books on your own, and possibly are Asian.
-- mizal on 10/19/2017 12:21:07 PM with a score of 0
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