Farewell, My Childhood Self
Love & Dating
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"trek through the forest"
"It'll be a while, better grab a Snickers®"
"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.
Do all first loves end up like us?
Oh man. This was so much nicer to read after that last storygame I just read. (Don't bother looking, it's trash) I really like the way the story was written in flashes of memory, and yet still incorporates everything a good and complete storygame requires.
The writing was very elegant and had a nice flow to it. It rose and fell, each time dragging me in even more until I had to play every path, click every link, and read every word until I had read it all. I did exactly that. It was so effortlessly sad, because it was written in such a way that no other story could meet this natural level of set mood.
It was the perfect length for the writing and the mood so that it lasted and only got stronger near the end. The characters were developed nicely, and were introduced quite impressively. There is an evident plot, even though it was written in such a broken way, and it still felt smooth and effortless. This is still one of my favorite storygames on the site and I hope you can return and create more works of art.
There was no obvious grammar and spelling mistakes, and this wouldn't have take away from the overall rating at all. It was a good use of pictures, but not everyone enjoys the animation style, but still, very good job. 8/8
on 11/5/2017 4:29:57 PM with a score of 0
This is the last comment I'll leave on this story. I had to give myself time to cool down, read other comments, and think a little more objectively, so that I could give an intelligent rebuttal.
As for the artwork... I honestly don't like anime/manga style, but I still recognize that talent and effort put into these illustrations. The art matches each scene well and makes the characters and story feel more real. I wish more interactives used illustrations like these.
While this story may have a few clichés, nothing about it feels forced, nothing manipulative. While many parts of the story are sad, many parts are happy. It's not a sob story, but a perfect blend of elements, moments happy and sad. Like life.
The sad ending doesn't come from some cheap plot twist or deus ex machina. It was set up, legitimate, and believable. Rather than sentimentally throwing cheap melodrama at the reader, the action and characters gradually draw the reader into the story, coax the reader into lowering their defenses and set them up for the endings flawlessly.
I also like that when it comes to sex, this story knows how much to show and how much to imply. To have an overt sex scene would have tarnished the story, made it feel like mere wanking material, not something beautiful. The little teases and steamy yet subtle illustrations give the story all the sexual tension a romance requires.
It is, in short a masterpiece. I have only two regrets. The first that the author does not seem to have produced any more of these gems. The second is that this story may have spoiled lesser interactive romances for me, forever. I have yet to find one that could come anywhere close to this.
-- Some Guy on 4/30/2013 1:04:30 AM with a score of 0
Just to add on what a couple of people (JJJ and jkulibert from memory) said below, the story was noticeably written to make the reader sad (or at least it felt that way). The story had so many love story cliches - the difference between my experience of the story and theirs is that they worked on me.
With that said, I still think you did an amazing job of making those cliches work. I've tried it and it's not as easy as it looks. (I don't like looking at your story in this "it's just a pile of cliches" sort of way, because it genuinely made me feel, but it would be unfair to leave this side of the review out.)
Anyway, thanks for writing this :)
on 1/14/2012 5:04:57 AM with a score of 0
It was very short, but almost made my cry. Almost.
on 1/7/2018 11:08:54 AM with a score of 0
it's alright :/
-- BlameNight on 1/2/2018 3:39:07 PM with a score of 0
This story is one of the most thoughtful and heart-wrenching i've ever read!
on 12/27/2017 9:45:39 PM with a score of 0
Sad emotional but nice I love it
-- Emma on 12/15/2017 3:24:01 AM with a score of 0
This is beautiful...
on 12/8/2017 8:43:39 PM with a score of 0
Our hearts are broken.
-- Anesu and hiba on 12/4/2017 11:01:28 AM with a score of 0
It was severely depressing based on how I comprehended it...
-- Leilani on 12/2/2017 8:13:05 PM with a score of 0
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