Farewell, My Childhood Self
Love & Dating
"even better than Reeses' Cups®"
played 7,701 times (finished 411)
"trek through the forest"
"It keeps going and going"
"i'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.
Do all first loves end up like us?
Beautiful, terrible, and completely wonderful don't even come close to describing this masterpiece. I look forward to future works like this. Thank you.
on 7/24/2012 1:42:40 PM with a score of 0
Just to add on what a couple of people (JJJ and jkulibert from memory) said below, the story was noticeably written to make the reader sad (or at least it felt that way). The story had so many love story cliches - the difference between my experience of the story and theirs is that they worked on me.
With that said, I still think you did an amazing job of making those cliches work. I've tried it and it's not as easy as it looks. (I don't like looking at your story in this "it's just a pile of cliches" sort of way, because it genuinely made me feel, but it would be unfair to leave this side of the review out.)
Anyway, thanks for writing this :)
on 1/14/2012 5:04:57 AM with a score of 0
It's well written, definitely. I didn't really love the pictures, I'm not really a fan of the style that they're in, but that's just my own griping, if I liked that style of picture, I think they would be perfect for the story. My major issue with this though is that it constantly feels like a pathetic appeal. That is to say, it feels as if you're consciously TRYING to "pluck my heart strings". The trick to writing a "sad" story is to make it sad, naturally. This felt sad predictably and sad for the sake of being sad. Since I felt that way, I didn't actually FEEL anything from your story. For an example of a similar story that's done more naturally, check out Snow by Sethaniel.
on 11/17/2011 1:01:08 PM with a score of 0
Damn you... I cried. Beautiful. Just beautiful. So many memories. Thank you.
on 5/10/2013 4:59:10 AM with a score of 0
At first I don't understand it but as I reach the end, I began turning sad... Nice Drawings!
-- IAmMystery on 5/4/2013 11:28:39 AM with a score of 0
i am crying but i know that their love will never die. :)
-- kristen on 5/3/2013 9:15:08 PM with a score of 0
This is the last comment I'll leave on this story. I had to give myself time to cool down, read other comments, and think a little more objectively, so that I could give an intelligent rebuttal.
As for the artwork... I honestly don't like anime/manga style, but I still recognize that talent and effort put into these illustrations. The art matches each scene well and makes the characters and story feel more real. I wish more interactives used illustrations like these.
While this story may have a few clichés, nothing about it feels forced, nothing manipulative. While many parts of the story are sad, many parts are happy. It's not a sob story, but a perfect blend of elements, moments happy and sad. Like life.
The sad ending doesn't come from some cheap plot twist or deus ex machina. It was set up, legitimate, and believable. Rather than sentimentally throwing cheap melodrama at the reader, the action and characters gradually draw the reader into the story, coax the reader into lowering their defenses and set them up for the endings flawlessly.
I also like that when it comes to sex, this story knows how much to show and how much to imply. To have an overt sex scene would have tarnished the story, made it feel like mere wanking material, not something beautiful. The little teases and steamy yet subtle illustrations give the story all the sexual tension a romance requires.
It is, in short a masterpiece. I have only two regrets. The first that the author does not seem to have produced any more of these gems. The second is that this story may have spoiled lesser interactive romances for me, forever. I have yet to find one that could come anywhere close to this.
-- Some Guy on 4/30/2013 1:04:30 AM with a score of 0
A different ending today. A happier one, I think...
To put it lightly, this story is everything a romantic interactive story could ever hope to be. The characters feel real, the choices are diverse, and the emotion is sincere and startling. To say it touched my heart would be cliché and clumsy, a compliment far unworthy of anything this beautiful.
But it did. It touched my heart. Bravo.
-- Some Guy on 4/27/2013 7:24:44 PM with a score of 0
This had me in absolute tears. The art-work is beautiful, and the story is gripping.
I wan to write more, but the tears have blurred my eyes...
-- Some Guy on 4/27/2013 6:12:23 AM with a score of 0
Oh my god. This story is beautiful. I'm crying after finishing this. You did an amazing job, keep writing.
on 4/26/2013 10:26:47 PM with a score of 0
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