Full moon's night

Player Rating4.30/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 100 ratings since 03/01/2016
played 1,018 times (finished 118)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

This is literally a fairy thingamabob. For the Riddles and Puzzles contest entry

 

Honorable Mention: Riddles & Puzzles 2016

Player Comments

The idea of the storygame was okay, but I think that it could be elaborated upon. I liked the riddles, but they were a little easy and there should be more than just two. It was enjoyable nonetheless, so I think it is a good start.

I like how the author's word choice and portrayal gave the storygame an old and magical feeling, as if it really was in a dark forest. More attention and effort should have been placed into proofreading this, because there was a lot of punctuation errors that (unfortunately) took away from the storygame's worth.

The plot moves along smoothly, but I don't like that it came to such a quick ending. I understand that the author was on a deadline, but if they truly cared about writing their story and doing well in the contest, it would have been finished before the contest was even close to over and might have possibly won if it was longer and more story was put behind the idea.
-- Nyctophilia on 2/26/2017 1:56:19 PM
Really like the writing here and the dark, twistedly beautiful fairy-tale feel of the story. It's nice to read a storygame that focuses on setting atmosphere rather than throwing you into the thick of what's going on, and you did that quite well.

The plot is linear, but it works. Yet I can't help but think that if you did a few branching pathways, it might fit in very well with the forest theme. Lots of potential here you could definitely expand on.
-- SoSaidL on 3/3/2016 6:51:08 PM
I loved the writing itself, it's just a shame you couldn't proofread it. Lots of missing punctuation, etc. I know there was a deadline, but unless you were just riiight on the wire with it, reading over a story of this length and slap down some periods wouldn't have taken too long. That's really my only major complaint, though. The setting, from the first couple of sentences on is just dripping with atmosphere, and I love the fairy tale logic at play here. The realization at the end of just who the two who gave you the riddles had been was a nice one, and in a story about riddles it seemed fitting you didn't actually spell it out.

If this were ever expanded into a longer story I'd of course appreciate having more choices beyond just the answers to the riddles, but what's here, works.
-- mizal on 3/2/2016 11:56:24 PM
This is interesting, and very easy to get wrapped up in. Bravo!
-- The_Broken_God on 4/25/2019 8:23:20 PM
Full Moon's Night had a lot of parts that almost captivated me.

The narration had many elements that were beautiful. The confusion and otherworldliness was notable, bit there was also quite a bit that really broe up the immersion. The biggest of these was when "you" was referenced several times early on. If there is going to be a "you" in the story, it had better be the guy whom I am making choices for, else I am going to be rereading passages because I am unsure of what is going on and wondering when the point of view is going to switch. "You" never did get to make the choices. This issue alone, if fixed, would have improved my experience reading the story immensely.

I found the setting of the story very interesting and enjoyed reading and finding out more about it. The general impression of it that I got as I read was that of an old fairy-tale and very suitable.

The story itself was quite linear. There were a few premature death/madness end links, and that was all before the end. On the one hand, this made it easy to read everything, but on the other hand, it eliminated a lot of replay value.

Overall, this was an eerie and delightful story that cold have been even more.
-- Cricket on 4/23/2019 2:36:04 AM
Pretty good
-- Alora on 4/11/2019 2:43:20 PM
The writing itself was pretty good. This author knows how to describe interestingly. The punctuation and spacing was all over the place, which made it really hard to read. There were additional spaces and dropped spaces all over the place. Really, this would have been improved if it could be expanded, with more character development and much more attention spent on the conclusion. The dead ends along the way could also have had more interesting detail and description as well. An interesting read, though.
-- Gower on 4/5/2019 9:35:41 AM
Beautiful little story! Would have loved to have had more interaction with Aspen and had the story continue. Even so, I was greatly pleased with reading this offering and would love to see more from this author.
-- Robert Harrison on 3/28/2019 11:05:00 AM
You get a meh! On the NomNom scale. You're writing was not bad, but the riddles could be improved upon. Also, I would have like there to have been more detail, but well nice try!

Conversion Chart:
yuk!=0-1 stars
eh!=1-1.9 stars
meh...=2-2.9 stars
nom=3-3.9 stars
nomnom=4-4.9 stars
nomnomnom!=5-6 stars
-- Cake_Oi on 1/30/2019 9:47:09 AM
I wish it was longer. I liked the story.
-- Faervel on 4/15/2018 10:49:25 AM
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