, #55 for
played 3,597 times (finished 182)
"run through the jungle"
"A well spent lunch break"
"choking hazard for children under 4"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 6. To compare to the movie rating system, this would be G.
This is a game where you choose if you go to college, what job you want, if you are going to get a significant other ,and how hard you work. There is no certain gender in this game. You can be a girl or boy if you want. I hope that makes sense. Anyways, will you succeed? This is only my second game, my first game wasn't a hit. But I'm trying again! Thanks for playing!(:
I'd like to say I enjoyed myself, but this may have been the worst story i've read in a while.
Ok, listen, I understand the occasional "your," and "you're," screw up and maybe a few misspelled words throughout a storygame, but the grammar in this was horrible. Come on, did you even try? There was even a link that had an exclamation mark, with a comma and a space before it. Grammar matters.
Also, you screwed up with the branching. In one path, you can barely try, but somehow you still end up having a ton of money. Many paths led to the same ending.
Transitions were choppy, and sloppy. Neither of those words are good, as silly as they sound when used in a sentence together. You were pretty much saying a sentence, then somehow leap to another sentence with almost no relation to the other. That's not how you write a good storygame. It makes it very linear.
Character development was almost nonexistant. Work harder on your plot, branching, spelling, characters, and effort.
on 5/10/2017 9:16:27 PM
on 4/24/2017 3:38:46 PM
Cute, short story.
on 1/23/2017 6:28:44 PM
its strangely short but its a good time waster
-- Feromount on 1/19/2017 6:14:39 PM
Cool, should be longer
on 11/28/2016 7:40:54 PM
That was really short.
on 7/15/2016 11:12:00 AM
A bit too short. Way tooo short
-- Jenniece on 6/2/2016 10:18:48 PM
Great game but plz make more opitons
-- Nightfur on 1/8/2016 11:10:16 PM
this is a very short game and its kind of pointless, its up to you if you want to play.
on 11/8/2015 9:03:11 PM
Uh, not a good game, I wish it could have been written like the actual life game, also, that was not very descriptive at all, it was not thought out. Looks like another game was made in like 1 or 2 hours, to improve, dramatically improve the time you use to make a game. A game should take more than just an hour to create, the best gamers tak a long time, but are rewarded with featuring of storygames or even points. The secret to good games is the time that is put in to the game, as well as grammatical errors being fixed, and havine a unique concept.
on 10/22/2015 9:54:43 PM
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