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played 5,457 times (finished 520)
"trek through the forest"
"A nice jog down the driveway"
"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
A cool Medieval adventure game.
This game has potential. I liked the framework of the adventure and the ability to gain items and allies along the way.
It would have been vastly improved if there was more than a single line of description on each page. As it stands, the story's quite bare, and the lack of pictures means there's not much there to engage the reader. I zoomed through it in probably less than five minutes. Still entertaining, but not engaging.
Also, the fact that a 'team of men' is presented as an item with the picture of a bag implies a rather grisly way of taking them with you.
on 7/25/2014 12:03:54 AM with a score of 4400
There are lots of drawbacks of this story. It could be really interesting, but there's no characterization, or plot for that matter. I'm a knight. That's all I know. That and I have enough gold to throw around whether I take the gold from the orcs or not. There's a point where it says something along the lines of "You tell the man your story" and then he is so moved, that he lends you his help in the form of militia. That's great. Do we get to be in on this moving story? There are also bugs such as you save the girl, and she follows you, but nothing is said about her again. Also nothing is said about the 'message' you have for someone in the castle. Or near the castle. I can't remember. These are just some things you might want to consider expanding on, in order to make a better story.
on 5/23/2013 5:05:06 PM with a score of 100
Short story with a good setting.
-- Tunak23 on 9/14/2018 6:07:58 PM with a score of 4550
very,verrrrry short my man
on 4/27/2017 11:52:39 AM with a score of 3400
it was a decent game if you were to make it a little longer then this then i would play again
on 2/14/2017 9:31:54 AM with a score of 4550
Very nice adventure indeed. Some spelling errors, but they didn't affect the experience. All in all, I enjoyed this adventure.
-- Striv on 2/11/2017 2:52:15 PM with a score of 3550
I found a link that led to a page that had no links and said "This is a new page."
This seemed pretty lazy, you should check your storygames before you publish them.
on 12/22/2016 5:05:46 PM with a score of 100
-- no on 11/29/2016 3:00:21 PM with a score of 0
This game is just horrible. Should be for boredom problems only.
-- Trisha on 11/29/2016 1:36:27 PM with a score of 1050
Nice game, though it should be a little bit longer.
on 10/18/2016 3:31:37 PM with a score of 4400
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