Player Comments on Night in the Woods
Some pages contained only a minimum amount of sentences, so I highly suggest that you revise that. For example, on some pages, you only have one to three sentences which I found uninteresting. I noticed that you had some grammatical mistakes where you needed to put a period or a comma, but it wasn't that noticeable. I would prefer that the game would be a bit longer, so keep the length in mind.
You could have also added some of those effects, like adding in health, ammo, weapons, something around those lines. That could have been a nice and an interesting touch, but that's just a little comment. The pictures were OK, they didn't add that much significance (in my opinion) to the story. Use more imagery; that's interesting and fun to read.
Anyways, the story game was a pleasant and a fun read, but in some parts, you lost my attention, and I was uninterested. Make sure to make your game interesting and fun for others, and I noticed that you were trying to build suspense, so nicely done. Give more details on some pages, and don't make your story-games linear. Congratulations on publishing your first game; I'll be looking forward to your next one.
on 5/8/2018 10:07:43 PM with a score of 0
Good start and good setup. I like the premise of the story on the first page. I am lonely and sad, but I am experienced in the mountains. And lost. I am ready to go…somewhere. I was a little disappointed that there are no choices at all on the first two pages. It can certainly work to split up pages like that, especially if there is long content, but in this case the second page has just two lines. I’m not sure that page should be a page by itself there…at least I get a choice on the next page.
I like the various options beyond the start there. I spent some time in the cabin, even when it got creepy. I like that there’s different endings throughout, though some of them are clearly random. Sometimes it’s nicer to have hints when an ending is going to lead to death. Not always, but sometimes. I didn’t see any hints here (though they might have been there and I just missed them).
Again, later in the story, I found a number of pages in a row with one paragraph and no choices. I don’t really mind the one-paragraph pages, but when they are combined with no choices, I’m not sure I really see the point. Perhaps you were trying to build suspense?
All in all, a very nice short story. It was easy to read and I really do like that the choices actually matter. I’d love to see more and perhaps even a longer story like this. I had fun going back and trying different choices – and that was one of my most favorite things to do with the original choose your own adventure stories!
on 4/30/2018 2:08:42 PM with a score of 0
This game definitely needs more meat on its bones. In many places, I felt you could have fleshed out the environment, or maybe describe the atmosphere. As a result, I often lost interest in the story, and just when it starts to get good, you get a brief death description. You didn't completely mess it up however. Despite your lack of description, I found your writing ability to be good enough to get me to finish. I personally really like the concept. Bonus points for pictures
on 9/29/2018 12:47:13 AM with a score of 0
Really liked it. Don't know why it isn't rated higher.
on 9/17/2018 1:17:58 AM with a score of 0
Made it to the happy ending! Phew.
on 6/22/2018 12:21:06 AM with a score of 0
Oh. I get it, I'm being punished for being too lazy and not wanting to make a fire.
on 6/22/2018 12:14:30 AM with a score of 0
This storygame was short, interesting, and simple, just the way I like them. Good job on this!
-- Person on 5/25/2018 4:21:01 PM with a score of 0
Quite random but not bad.
on 5/24/2018 4:26:06 AM with a score of 0
Fun but too short.
-- Person on 5/2/2018 9:04:27 PM with a score of 0
It's definitely something. I need to keep in touch with your stuff.
on 5/2/2018 6:46:01 AM with a score of 0
It wasn't that bad, but it wasn't great. There really wasn't much to the game, I was determined to stay in that cabin, and the game wasn't to hard. You have potential to make a better game though. This one was short, but it had it's scary moments. I always thought that something was going to jump out at me, and I was surprised that something didn't.
on 4/30/2018 6:44:15 AM with a score of 0
This storygame seemed as if it took time to make so I’ll give you credit for that. However, the content of each page was slightly slacking in the sense that it lacked...substance. Detail. Vocabulary. The sentences you wrote in your story were good enough to keep me interested but yet not enough to completely hook me in and get into the world you’ve written.
Pretty good; don’t review your own storygame, and try to give vivid detail next time.
on 4/26/2018 12:13:38 AM with a score of 0
I'll come back to do read and do an actual review, but did you leave a comment on your own story?
If so, don't do that in the future unless your responding to other comments.
on 4/24/2018 12:32:28 PM with a score of 0
Pretty good for your first storygame. I didn't notice any grammatical errors or anything, and it has a good storyline. I enjoyed it.
on 4/24/2018 9:29:00 AM with a score of 0
I had a scare at the end- like the pics, it makes things fun.
on 4/23/2018 12:13:41 PM with a score of 0