DiniTheWizard, The Wordsmith

Member Since

3/1/2017

Last Activity

12/17/2017 4:14 PM

EXP Points

210

Post Count

303

Storygame Count

0

Duel Stats

22 wins / 29 losses

Order

Sage

Commendations

25

I'm just that anime addict who lurks around on this website, and I'm seeking tips from my beloved god called EndMaster as he inspires me to write about whatever shtuff I write. 

 I'm that person named Dini on this site, and I like to shed my perspective on political topics, forum posts, romance threads and whatnot. I'll always be here if you have any questions or concerns, so feel free to contact me. If you need any advice for any games, just DM me and I'll try to get back to you ASAP. I usually specialize in Nintendo and anime games, so yeah. 

Working on some collaborations with some renowned members on this site so I can't guarantee that I can help everyone with their games, but I'll try. Seto and I are working on our trash collection which features a couple of story-generated plots. Yeah, we decided to tackle this little challenge because we wanted to. MK (MinnieKing) and I are working on this horror collab so we have no farking idea when we are going to release it, but it's probably going to be in 2018 tops. 

Oh- Ford thanks for the amazing profile picture! 

 

Personal Goals: 

To finish a damn story-game. (I'm releasing my game pretty soon, so this may get crossed off!) 

To have my username red and bolded. 

To be used as a beta-tester.

To receive my first trophy.

To finally beat all of the Zelda games. 

To have 1000 plus points.

To receive a personal trophy. 

To have a story-game to be featured. 

Now I'll kindly escort you off of my profile page because I don't want to deal with pedos, stalkers, perverts or trollers. 

 

I'm also available to help beta-test and to review your stories before they will be published. If you have any questions, complains or concerns, just DM me and I'll try to get back to you ASAP. 

 

Oh, I'm not dead by the way. I'm regularly monitoring the Forums so don't think that I left. Oh- I'm working on a horror/romance story-game which you will hopefully enjoy. 

 

 

 


 

Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points

Storygames

Defense Point 8D
unpublished , coauthor

This is my first story-game, and it is about you playing as the leader of Defense Point 8D. There are many endings to this game, and I welcome constructive criticism. Feel free to praise DiniTheWizard for helping me in this endeavor! 


Pokémon Quiz
unpublished

This is meant for comedic purposes and I don't want people to think that I'm a furry pedophile with no life. (Not that I even am one, so stop assuming things you fucking bitch.) 

Now stop reading the motherfucking description and play the damn game. 

Fucking Google these answers, and I will know that you're a fraud. 

So, I just wanted to test if you were a real Pokémon maniac, or if you're just pretending to be one of the cool/emo/weeaboo kids. You aren't an original anime addict, so back the hell away. 


Recent Posts

Draw My Attention (Toxic Creativity) on 12/17/2017 4:09:23 PM

Oh. I forgot that the comments should be from a story-game rated 3.00 and higher. Carry on. 


Sanitarium! (Collaborative CYOA) on 12/17/2017 3:53:48 PM

Yeah. I was still uncertain about choice I would pick, and I finally made up my mind.  

But reading Helen's backstory would be interesting.. 


Sanitarium! (Collaborative CYOA) on 12/17/2017 3:36:26 PM

C. Seeing Mildred's actions make me seem a bit uneasy, and we don't want to draw attention to ourselves. Also, those voices could manipulate Mildred's mind in a negative or positive way. 


The Last Jedi (spoilers, obviously) on 12/17/2017 3:19:56 PM

I still prefer the old movies to the new ones. I mean, I used to love Darth Maul and those old baddies. The new movies don't have that same ol' vibe to it. Also, they fucking got rid of Han Solo, and now Carrie Fisher's dead. It certainly isn't the same. 


Draw My Attention (Toxic Creativity) on 12/17/2017 3:17:08 PM

So here's my comment from a book which I think should be featured. Here's the link: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/remember It was brutal, but the writer needed to see it. 

Before I start ranting about all of the imperfections which your story has, I'll state the positives. 

The book was eerie, and the story of the ghost girl is actually interesting. It leaves you hanging with questions, which again is a cliffhanger and doesn't provide the closure which readers like to see. I see where you were going with this story, but you didn't hit your mark. 

Now the negatives. I found many mistakes which were constantly being repeated in your game. Punctuation was one of them. 

"Yes" 

Take this passage as an example. If you don't remember what your elementary teachers had taught you, I'll say it again. There must be punctuation in between the quotation marks. I don't see a period or a comma which is closing up that dialogue. This was constantly being repeated throughout your game which proved to be a major issue to me. 

I put up my fists and gave a punch to her neck. She grabbed my arm and squeezed it until I couldn't fell a thing. She then pushed me to the ground and stomped on me until I bled to death 

Well, there isn't a period at the end of your sentence so boohoo. The lack of detail really makes this game seem dull and lifeless, and that it is written by a second-grader. As you said that you were a teenager, you should have a more.. ah, refined english than younger children. Also, we want more details in your fight scene. It's so boring, we don't care. We want blood and gore. It isn't called horror for no reason at all! 

Also, capitalization was a issue as well in this book. I'll briefly talk about it because you should know that you always capitalize PROPER nouns. "The Man nods his head." will be used as an example. You didn't tell us who this man is, so it wouldn't be capitalized because it ISN'T a PROPER noun. 

The lack of detail, lack of development for the characters and the plot, no regard for punctuation or capitalization at all make me rate this a 1/8 or a 2/8. 


This had potential, but you had ruined it. I'm sorry if this is harsh, but it is true. Focus on the negatives which I stated above and try to obliviate them. This is the brutal truth, and the truth that you need to hear. My sincere apologies if you take this to your heart. 

-- DiniTheWizard on 12/17/2017 3:14:01 PM


Sanitarium! (Collaborative CYOA) on 12/17/2017 1:39:58 PM

D. I don't want to draw any attention to myself and I want to blend in with everyone else. Also, it wouldn't be wise to be the first one to tell their tale because people might use that information against you, and you do some digging on other people first. 


CYS Adventure! on 12/17/2017 1:37:45 PM

I'll use this as a motivation to write. Page 88 please! 


Doki Doki Literature Club Review on 12/17/2017 9:24:40 AM

I actually loved Doki Doki because it concealed the fact that it was a horror game. Oh- if you didn't do this yet, you should check the game files. When you're talking to Monika and you want to get rid of her, pop up her game file and delete it. There are little poems in the game files which is interesting. Oh, also if you check like the coding shtuff for the game, there's going to be some interesting messages there. 


MA BIRTHDAY! on 12/17/2017 9:21:37 AM

Congratulations on turning fourteen. 


Commendations, orders, etc on 12/17/2017 9:18:35 AM

There's an article on it. Ogre provided the link, so all of the information you need is in that article.