Player Comments on Reckless Young Man

The first page starts out as a nice surprise after reading that this was very short and basically a demo. When I see that on the page properties page, I really do get my expectations reduced. If it’s a demo, I just don’t see any reason to actually publish it. Well, there are some reasons, but none are all that good. After all, people here are looking for quality stories (at least some of the readers here are, anyway).

There is some really good writing on that first page. Sure, the tone and the scene are pretty crappy, but I guess that’s the point. But the point was received quite well with the good writing. I wouldn’t have minded to know just a little bit more about the car, myself, so I know what the main character is driving. It’s a four-barrel, but what else?

The writing was good throughout. The options were, well not all that great, IMO. But there were options and the different options led to different endings, and that was really nice to see in a CYOA. As mentioned in the intro, indeed the story, no matter which options were selected, was very, very short. This story has a little potential and really could be developed a bit more into a much better story. But again, the writing was very good for a story of this length. Thank you for sharing it with the site.

The author was right.

No comment. But I will say, this was very funny.

well that is diffidently rated r but it was also pretty nice

Not as bad as the rating suggests

I got dumped by Arianna, guess she didn't like the foreplay

This story is a little better than expected after reading the description. I liked the concept, and the story was pretty well written and presented.

The story could have used more choices, and the disturb the peace path definitely should have been developed more.

The writing was fairly well done, and I found myself getting into the story from the start. However, it is SHORT- Yep, I'm going to tell you anyway. The shortness bothered me because just as it started moving along, the narrative ended, and I wanted more to read.

Overall, a fun and enjoyable story, but way too short.

Despite the shortness of it, I really enjoyed this.

Dude you used a SUPER offensive word

Well written, made me laugh

3/8
Why?-Not everyone chooses what you think they would, plus some parts were predictable to me, namely plan C, saw that coming a mile away.

Awesome haha. Not an inspiring epic, but the humorous chooseyourownstory that's just as great.

HILARIOUS! Worth way more than the five minutes it took to play!

That was fast. xD lol.
Disturb the peace ftw.

Ya, Donuts. What's Reckless in Dictionary Means anyway?

Good 'un!

Like the game. Not just because I dueled you. No, I like the game because it is very explanitory but you need !put more deqil inffthe story. Saying that you had fun is not explanning and make the maturity level higher. I would have still played the game. Nice job!

Awwww man you troll!!!!!!!

I LOVE THIS GAME IM LAUGHING MY ASS OFF

Not bad, but I had to subtract one from six cause it was way too short, especially for such a fun game.

Nice, but could be better.

Short but neat storygame. lovely writing

I think your writing's really good! Am looking forward to reading some longer stories from you, but hope your next main character is more likable. Was really happy when this guy died! :p

xD loved the "disturb the peace" ending. Kudos.

That was pretty good. Your disturb the peace ending made me laugh. You correctly predicted my actions. This was fun, seeing as this line of thought is totally opposite mine, and I'm a girl. XD I had fun.^_^ 6/8

Beyond the horizon!
3/8

The beginning was promising. if you rewrite this you can make it a lot better as a long, good story.

. . . I don't like girls. (Even if I was male I wouldn't.)

I got the most reckless ending and what you said was so, so true

Oh my god bro, I loved it haha. It was so juvenile in the best of ways.

Also... it was short

It's soo funny XD the cursing could've been placed better and not used in every single senance. Other than that I thought it was entertaining.

Lol i guees I am out of the loop...
(spolier)
I decided to choose Distube the peace for my first time around thinking, I might get laid while becoming a Ganster dude. :P

Good

You use profanity without tact, seriously weakening the effect it COULD have. titular doesn't make sense where you put it. Overlooking that is was quite enjoyable, or at least the two pages that I read.

Decent writing. -1 for use of racial slur on the first page and -1 for using Titular Character on one of the pages.