"Too few ratings to be ranked"
played 320 times (finished 25)
"run through the jungle"
"A well spent lunch break"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.
I figured when I started the cleverly-titled “Succubus” that I was in for a fun trip.
I suppose I can relate to the opening on nights when my mother cooks—the part about being called ten minutes early, not the one part with the semen, usually.
The beginning could have been tied in better with the rest of the story. It was pretty obvious that the main character had been made a succubus because that is what the rules dictated and that the story had been shifted to a genre that the author was actually interested in writing about. Maybe it would have helped to expand a bit more on the backstory.
One thing I really appreciate in a story is death pages that have the same level of care put into them as other endings. Detailed death pages are nice. Detailed death pages were not found in this story.
I do appreciate that Ford added End Game links to the death pages though. It’s always annoying when a story doesn’t have those and forces you to either go back until you win or rage quit.
A lot of the choices didn’t matter, which really makes a difference in a story this short. Additionally, one of the choices does not actually have a link, and there were far more pages than necessary. If a page is only a paragraph or two long and choiceless, having a link to the next hundred-word page gets annoying.
Some of the endings did make me laugh, particularly the diaper one. I admit it. I like toilet humor. Those of you faggots who read reviews before stories and don’t like toilet humor would probably not find this story funny at all.
The quality of this story could probably have been improved a lot if the author had started a bit sooner before the deadline, but it didn’t cause me pain to read.
on 8/4/2019 7:16:48 PM with a score of 0
This was, um, weird. Sorta reminds me of the lol random stuff newbs make, just better.
on 8/5/2019 5:23:08 PM with a score of 0
I only ran one option and it was more coherent than I thought it would be. I half expected this to be a way for Ford to get a contest entry in and troll the readers, and it was that, but with less trolling than I expected.
Wasn't a terribly long story. It has the mature themes that you would expect from a succubus story.
on 8/3/2019 3:10:48 PM with a score of 0
I’m sure Ford’s already forgotten he’s written this, but I’ll chuck in my two cents anyway. It actually was better than I expected, for a story so lazily titled and an almost-absent description.
I’m not really sure why the unclickable link near the start was still there, and it was particularly annoying as this was probably the choice that I would’ve gone for. I also found that after this point, branching was practically non-existent. Really, the only significant choice made in the story is the ‘be a gangster’ or ‘be a normal person’ as after that the story becomes progressively more and more into a ‘choose the right option or die’ or just a straight-up click through.
In terms of the theme, I thought it might have a gotten a bit lost. A couple of times I was just reading along and would completely forget that it was actually succubus themed story.
It was fairly fast paced, but the writing was better than comprehendible and with more of an effort the story could’ve been something decent.
on 7/31/2019 4:56:36 AM with a score of 0
Nah, upon a second reading I decided I overrated this story the first time.
on 7/31/2019 12:52:45 AM with a score of 0
So I started reading a story about a succubus... and ended up successfully escaping a business building during a fire drill? Seriously?
I may go back for a re-read just for the sake of politeness, but the story progressed too quickly to become invested in anything that was happening, and I had a hard time caring about who anybody was.
on 7/31/2019 12:40:29 AM with a score of 0
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