VUWSA's NZUSA Referendum

Player Rating1.51/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 33 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length1/8

"Make sure not to blink"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

Tags

will vuwsa leave nzusa?? will rory and rick have a fight in the street?? who knows!

Player Comments

So... this is about trying to get a New Zealand student association to withdraw from a union, right?
-- BradinDvorak on 9/28/2015 1:38:09 PM
I didn't understand, it was all a bunch of capitalized gibberish...
-- ISentinelPenguinI on 9/28/2015 9:58:07 AM
I have no idea what this story is or means. The joy of abbreviations is that things we know can be expressed in a simple form rather than a long winded form. When you don't know what VUWSA and NZUSA means it is like reading another language. Please translate.
-- Will11 on 9/26/2015 2:14:40 PM
No satisfying ending, no idea who my character is (personality/values wise) or what I'm doing, and just a huge lack of detail present throughout story.

It's also extremely linear, with only one particular choice in each branch allowing you to continue through the story.

I just couldn't care about what was going on. Maybe if I knew more about a few people in my office, or learned a bit more about this family that I have, I would have had been more determined to see through the final outcome.

As for the lack of detail, one whole page was simply:
"Ok, they said."
Minus the quotations, of course.

I need detail in my story games, characters I'm interested in, and some overarching goal I can get behind. This lacks all three and is ludicrously short; took me less than five minutes to complete, I reckon, and defiantly doesn't warrant a 4/8 for maturity (didn't even spot any light swearing).

Whilst the idea of being an exec in a political party/whatever/what even is VUWSA/NZUSA?/ect is one that hasn't been done before and hence holds some appeal, I feel like you just did this to test out the editor. I'd suggest finding a genre you like to read and then writing a piece of fiction in that genre; if you like writing it, more people are likely to like reading it.

And finally, make sure you re-read over your work (preferably multiple times, say six to a dozen) to check for grammar/spelling/clarity in storytelling/ect and take time to work on your stories. Rushing only hinders you as a writer and makes the piece less enjoyable for the reader.

Good luck in future endeavors.
-- Aducan on 9/26/2015 6:05:26 AM
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