You live in a community where everyone has magic. It's your coming of age and you're so exited... but you don't get magic. You're looked down upon and ridiculed. Then later your village is attacked and a miracle happens...

     The Armed With Wings image at the beginning was drawn by me, although I edited it so you could see the color better because it was a bit faded looking.

     Ignore the sentences at the top, they're not part of the story game. They're there for me to know the timeline. Most or all of my stories are going to be in one massive multiverse, so I use it to know when it is in comparison to other stories as to not have my stories collide or if they do I know it. If you want to know how it works, the gen is short for generation which is for generation of characters which will be a large amount of time, the second thing is the most important event that's happening in any of my stories at that time or is closest to that time and the others are dates and times and the abbreviations are for what time system it is (usually not from earth).

     You're in a lab, and your head seems foggy. You can't remember anything and can't seem to think straight. You have to get out and learn what the heck is happening.

     This is my 2nd story game, and probably better than the first one. This was made the same way I made my first one, with put together bits and pieces of other stories I've already written. Sorry if some variables or something isn't working right, I'm still figuring out how to use everything.

     The cover image (the doll) was drawn by me.

     Thank you RKralloner and my sister (Bloo on this site) for inspiration, and goodnight for proofreading. :)

     Ignore the sentences at the top, they're not part of the story game. They're there for me to know the timeline. Most or all of my stories are going to be in one massive multiverse, so I use it to know when it is in comparison to other stories as to not have my stories collide or if they do I know it. If you want to know how it works, the gen is short for generation which is for generation of characters which will be a large amount of time, the second thing is the most important event that's happening in any of my stories at that time or is closest to that time and the others are dates and times and the abbreviations are for what time system it is (usually not from earth).

This is not a story game, it's for me incase I forget something important.

Atoms are atoms, and science doesn't matter really, that's your perspective. Until you get mysteriously transported to a world where science is everything...

This is my endmaster's edutainment contest entry. There are 8 main branches with some options that'll kill you along the way. It'll start as a main branch, break off into 2 pretty similar branches, then both will break off into 4 branches (1 on each kills you) making 6 very different branches.

Testing game features, THIS IS NOT A STORYGAME

     There's giant holes that appeared in 2025, they drop to The Grid. A series of 5 meter by 5 meter by 5 meter cubes that are connected by some sort of tube, in a, you guessed it, a grid pattern. Up and down, left and right. No one who's gone into The Grid, has ever come out.
     Well, you just made a fantastic decision and decided to go in. Bye!

Please notify me of any flaws, and I'm up for constructive criticism. My story Testing 123 (unpublished, and will stay that way for eternity) is my sandbox for playing with site features and figuring out how they work, and this is my first time using any of these things so please tell me if the username, randomizing system, inventory, or anything else isn't working properly.

     The broken had horrific things done to them by that evil Dr. Jack, and he was going to do it to you... but you got out. He didn't break you, you and your community are Unbroken. (You're a woman, in this story)

     My third story (not including my thunderdome story) that I have written. Dr. Jack is inspired by Dr. Wondertainment from the SCP foundation.

     You're a average teenage girl called Kine, if you can be called average when you're one of the two best players of all time of the game BATTLEGROUNDS. But one day you get sucked into the game you spent most of your days playing...

     I've been posting less because I was posting too much. I thought I'd post about the amount other's seemed to be which wasn't often. Is there usually often more posting?

     The only story in the newley created section I haven't read and rated is Shadow of a God-King (that's the title, right?) but I'm too young too read it!!!  X(

     Anyways, I was wondering about proofreading, how many people do you suggest getting a story proofread by? I read it, a few others did, and I know it's good to get insight from multiple people with fresh eyes. I haven't exactly seen tons of profiles saying "I can proofread!" and my proofread thread only got gryphon to read it, Liminal never read it or if he did never PMed me or posted in the thread his review ._.

>:(

What remains of Anthraxus isn't pretty after I run out of amo.

I respawn because I had... a clone in an alternate dimension waiting to jump in? Out of my pocket I pull out a massive bazooka and let loose destruction while also using white out on the sign calling me silly and writing "This is definitly not anger issues." on it.

I would do more, but I don't know the layout of your imaginary house and don't want to assume or shape how it is with my actions when it's YOUR imaginary house so I'll leave it at that.

*Sounds of me raising my fully loaded gun and pointing it at the dogs*

And don't get smart with me, it isn't broken, it won't malfunction when used, we're not placed in such a way the I'm pointing at a wall, I'm not unable to use the gun in anyway, I'm not imobile, such and such. And the door doesn't close on me and break my neck, I hate when people pull that on me.

*sounds of anthraxus's door creaking open*

If you call me silly one more time I'll find a way to carve your eyes out.

Fluxion, SOME grammar cleanup (no offense meant daisy!)?! Sorry this is 12 days late...

1. "...traffickers. Riley..." (the ...s are skipping unnecessary text) this is more of a suggestion than a fact it needs fixing, but I still think you should put a period there and not a comma.

2. "...supposed..." Sopposed is spelling it wrong.

3. "...school of heroes..." I would normally skip this because you could be referring to the schools by the name school of hero (even though I find that a tad odd) but earlier you say "...villains..." which suggests hero in this part should also be plural. Also, I know heroes looks wrong and you may be tempted to write heros but if I didn't mess up somewhere heroes is the correct spelling for hero plural.

4. "...if your lucky..." Is supposed to be (the quotations marks doesn't mean it's an actual quote!) "...if you're lucky..."

5. "...just cause..." This is because, but I understand lots of people (me included) use 'cause but you need to have the ' at the start or it's cause as in it caused the storm.

6. "Hero are rare..." Again, it's heroes.

7. "...who goes..." Who go, not goes. You shouldn't change tenses in one paragraph (I'm working on staying on one tense too).

8. "...heros..." You use plural this time, but it's heroes not heros.

9. "... to me'..." (I used ' where you used " because it was already inside quotation marks) it's to me? You forgot the punctuation.

10.  "throw a bucket" is supposed to be throws a bucket.

11. "...'wash..." it's Wash, you forgot to capitalize.

12. "...palace'..." it's palace. (with a period! The period isn't me ending my sentence, it's me putting a period after as a correction).

13. it's myself, not my self.

14. "...outfit it a..." it's "...outfit. It is a...".

15. "...bruises and jeans..." should be "...bruises, and there's jeans..." or you could just do "...bruises, and jeans..." because the way you have written it it can easily be misinterprited as the jeans are covering the bruises. Unless that IS what you mean and I got confused...

16. Like Fluxion said, this part with the sun and sky need a lot more text.

17. Maybe describe the car more like talk about how dark tinted windows and blah blah blah made you feel intimidated or something.

18. "...inside the..." should be "...inside. The..." or  "...inside, the..." Also maybe write an actual conversation between the three slaves.

19. "...other two slave..." should be slaves not slave.

20. I'm confused about the last part... you mean kids around a stage? The kids are the stage?

     Also, this is way too short even for a short story. You should add more at the end, and if you're going for a cliffhanger there's not enough tension or suspense. Also, you haven't even finished the exposition as I have no feel for the characters or the world. Ok... there's some school of villains and heroes and... I don't understand any of the things the character seems to. If she's also confused, make that more clear. You need a lot more world and character building as right now it's almost non existant.

It'll take me years to get rainbow text if I ever do :(

Is rainbow text the only thing or can mods pretty much mess with their profile in tons of ways? I noticed custom titles like Malks.

I know this isn't exactly an important question... but how the heck did Mizal get such a cool title on her profile page?!?! I want rainbow color changing text :(

I swear if someone says you have to be an admin to get that my head's going to explode.