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Hi everyone.

My first contribution to this site. A historical fiction choose your own adventure story.

Title: Warlords: Strategic Conquest

Please leave your comments, feedback, suggestions for improvement, typos, etc.

http://www.chooseyourstory.com/Story/Warlords_0x3a__Strategic_Conquest.aspx

the only concern i have about Edutainment, is that there is not much true history in the game. nor do i think he meant it be be educational. so since there is not a really good alternative, EE seems to fit for the time being. however, if we can get March back and have him play it im sure talks of possible featuring my be brought up. at that point we could possibly change things around.

nate

Urnamo obviously has writing skill, but that was incredibly linear. I'm pretty sure, in the governor's path at least, there's one correct path for every decision you make, the others lead to death. Also, every possible choice is shown at the beginning, which does not reflect the changing state of the empire. The siege, for example, came and went without any decisions.

So, good writing, but if that short and with the strategic look, should have branches and gameplay to it.

*especially* since the title of this thread is "my new game". It's more like a storypuzzle.

Thanks for the suggestions and compliments.

I've added a writer's note on the gamepage to protect readers from an unexpected early demise.

It really is too linear to be called a game. It's more of a strategic quiz, but I feel that anyone who reads carefully should be able to make the correct decisions.

Yeah, I guess I should have called this a story instead of a game.  Rookie mistake.

Really, lots of good suggestions in this thread.  Even the ones I didn't refer to, I've made a mental note of it. Keep em coming.

The diplomatic and military paths are really much better than the logistics path.

And Lone Wolf. Can't forget Dever's masterpiece.