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Well, some of you may remember me posting this progress report for a storygame that never was published. It used a different writing style than this beauty for the male storyline, but I ended up changing writing styles into my current for for the female one.

If you have nothing better to do, read this. It has a funny scripting error (since taking damage occurs a page too late), weird dialog, and characters who ignore what they originally were in mythology. Additionally, tie yourself to trees with your rope if you can and use the bow immediately in the first battle.

I'm always open to criticism, so feel free to... um, criticize.

It only lets me read the opening page in your second link.

The language could be a little more crisp, but it raised a story question. And I would have been intrigued enough to keep reading, which is the author's chief goal on an opening page.

Dang it, I totally forgot I did that. (I am very paranoid about people sneaking into my uncompleted storygames.) Thanks for catching that. I fixed it.

Also, "Casey", "Mairead", and "Braveheart" are all not supposed to be there, but I'll leave them there anyway. It'll make things easier.

If your wondering why the wolves keep on killing you, then use the rope when your in the tree.