a Fantasy by WouldntItBeNice

Commended by BerkaZerka on 9/21/2019 9:06:44 AM

Player Rating5.09/8

"#236 overall, #23 for 2016"
based on 126 ratings since 06/22/2018
played 1,481 times (finished 78)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length5/8

"Not going to lose any sleep"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

This is part of the School Based storygame contest.

This is Lawrence's final few days at Hawthorn School. Things become... memorable.

There is also an indirect sequel to one of the endings (the one with the highest point value). Here it is.

After two years, I want through and made a few slight changes. I polished a few things and made several grammar and spelling corrections.

Player Comments

I will prelude this review by saying that while a lot of elements of Solstice were not what I personally prefer, it is a fine story and probably better than the average on this site. Now I'll get on with it.

The branching style is very linear. The ending you receive is based entirely off how many points you earn by making the correct choices. This makes it bothersome if you are somebody like me who likes to read every page and ending, but if you are not like that, you might enjoy the challenge of attempting to earn a perfect score. Personally, I wish I would have gotten the perfect score sooner so I wouldn't have had to read the story more than twice to see the alternate pages, as that required a lot of clicking through pages I had already read.

Solstice was fighting an uphill battle for my attention from the start, as I have a hard time getting into stories that start off at school (What school has its own maintained graveyard anyway? Something weird was going on there, and I don't just mean Magdalena.) However, the writing was not dull, and the first person worked out all right, I thought. The sentences do almost all follow the same pattern, which can make things a little choppy. It was entertaining to have what the shaving cream prank was revealed, and pretty cool to reread and see the part with the watch and the tree. (If you get a perfect score the first time around, I would recommend going back and trying the other choices anyway if you have the patience, if just for the one part.)

For the most part, this was an enjoyable story, and if you are one of those faggots who read reviews before stories and you like school-based stories or those with ambiguously paranormal activity, or you're just flat-out bored and looking for a decent, clean, quick read, check this out.


-- Cricket on 4/22/2019 12:40:54 AM with a score of 175
Starting out reading, I’m trying to get a feel for where I am. It felt like present-day, but when I read about the tombstone that lasted hundreds of years, now it sounds like either fantasy setting or future setting. A minor potential typo on “The Graveyard” page: “the Maples.” Is the soft breeze blowing through maple trees? If so, that should be lower case, I believe. But if it is blowing through sometime called “the Maples,” then I’m not sure what that is now. Another minor type is “m’amm,” I think that should be “ma’am.”

I like the first page, but it leaves me with questions. There are some good descriptions to help set the mood, but there’s not enough for me to understand what’s going on. Someone is walking through the graveyard. Then they hear bells. So I’m guessing the school is next to the graveyard. And apparently there’s an old lady that hangs out in the graveyard next to the school, too. I guess it was attempted to be repaired with an explanation at the end, but it was still a bit unclear.

I’m confused again with the rush to the schoolhouse. The bells stopped and the character knew they were late…but they were early. Is this their first day at the school? I mean they were expecting to be late, but suddenly they were early. Not a huge deal, but a bit confusing. And then again in the next section – one moment the person was the only person in the room, but the next moment the instructor was talking to the class. The story is good, but it feels like there’s some transitions and sections just missing while I read along.

There are choices at times in the story, and they do appear to have an effect on the story. However, there were also a number of pages with no choices. I like the relationships option and appreciate those effects on the story. I like the building and changing of those relationships as the story progresses. Overall it is a nice story, thank you for sharing it here.
-- Ogre11 on 5/12/2018 7:22:42 PM with a score of 200
A well written story about school. This one felt more 'school' to me than any other in the contest. The characters felt real and believable and the setting seemed very tangible. Good entry. My only nitpick is that many of the choices didn't really have consequences and so it felt less like interactive fiction and more like just fiction.
-- donteatpoop on 7/7/2016 1:35:24 PM with a score of 220
Heartfelt and wonderful to read.
-- SmileForTheCamera on 1/3/2020 6:42:40 PM with a score of 1400
I really liked the elements you included.It was very enjoyable.
-- wowitsalex on 3/15/2019 8:46:04 AM with a score of 370
I liked this game. It was enjoyable to read. I'm pretty sure Mag was dead. It would of been cool to continue the story with the character coming back.
-- Faervel on 2/8/2019 1:31:33 PM with a score of 400
You got a nom on the nomnom scale. Your writing is good, and after reading your story it just kind of made me sad and reflex on my own life. The only spelling error i found was that you wrote hare, instead of here? Keep up the good work! Oh to find out the full description of the nomnom scale, look at my profile if you're curious.
Conversion Chart:
yuk!=0-1 stars
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meh...=2-2.9 stars
nom=3-3.9 stars
nomnom=4-4.9 stars
nomnomnom!=5-6 stars
-- Cake_Oi on 1/29/2019 9:56:02 PM with a score of 280
-- Marneptunez on 2/2/2018 4:53:36 PM with a score of 335
This game was simply AWESOME.
-- Snowflame on 4/7/2017 10:13:54 PM with a score of 400
This book is one of the best I've read so far!!! I still do not understand what Mag is, or who the wife is, but I know one thing for sure; THIS IS THE BOOK OF THE CENTURY! Best wishes!
-- jamma192 on 2/19/2017 1:19:39 PM with a score of 1400
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