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Warden

Don't get distracted!

The target has been decided. The deadline has been set. All that is left is for you, Adam Finch, assassin extraordinaire, to execute your mission. Success is inevitable. Because you are weapon made flesh, and nothing will stop you from completing your mis- Oh! Look! A story-game!!

There are 5 endings: 'Double kill', 'War in the shadows', 'Retiree rescue', 'Kiss of death' and 'Who let him cook?!'.

Submitted for End Master's Prompt Contest 4 for the prompt of: 'A story involving being an assassin'

Ignis and Aero

Aero, a 14-year-old inhabitant of the village of Albritton, wants nothing more than to read his enthralling storybooks in peace. When he hears of a Golem wandering in the forests near his village, he is more than happy to let the professionals deal with it, while staying within the comfort of his home.

Unfortunately for him, his adventurous brother, Ignis, has other plans.

Author's note: If you want to collect all endings, then there are six of them: The Wise, The Mourner, The Cleaner, The Knight, The Skeptic and The Magician. Certain choices don't have immediate effects but may influence the endings. Also, certain endings can be reached through multiple different paths.

Submitted for Sherbet's Summer's End Synergy Contest.

Special thanks to mrcrimsonclean for proof reading :]

Of dreams and daemons

Most would be willing to trade a great deal to catch a glimpse of what the future holds. Hannah de Reade, however, has spent her time in Lumintrone ignoring the omens that she sees in her prophetic dreams. All she wanted was some semblance of normalcy.

But when her dreams warn her of a daemonic plot, she is compelled to act against it, leading her to be invited as an honored guest to the Imperial Castle.

However, in a court filled with dark secrets, are her eyes that can pierce through fallacies truly a gift or a curse? You will have to take Hannah's side and guide her through this ordeal that will forever change her fate.

And perhaps you will change the fate of Lumina itself in the process.

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Author's note: There are nine endings. I highly recommend reaching multiple endings since you may not be able to experience the entirety of the plot with one read. While they are not central to the story, I should also warn that themes of domestic abuse and graphic violence are present in it.

Welcome in. This is probably the best place to get honest feedback on your writing. Looking forward to what you will post.

I will read Rogues at an unspecified point of time in the future. :]

I'm not gonna lie. Losing out on the strength card did sting a bit. It would've been the perfect tool to make a comeback of sorts. Ah well. I'm sure your review was brilliant as always (I can't read it yet since I actually am yet to read Rogues). Congrats. :D

Well... I'm sorry but the Death Song thing I pointed out is just plagiarism I'm afraid. You even pointed out the comments you got the info from. It'd be better for you to redeem yourself by writing authentic reviews on stories with no featured comments. It could be a start to fixing this. It's your call of course.

Also, I don't want this to come off as "Write only unique things." It's possible for multiple people to have the same opinion on a story. I'm just trying to say that authentic reviews are way more useful and worthwhile. If you authentically get the same impression of a story as someone else then that's fine, as long as it's what YOU really think.

If you feel like the story hasn't provided you with the proper information, then call the author out. Tell them that you think some information was missed or that there was some plot inconsistency. I guarantee that that would be more helpful to them than stuff they've already heard from other people. If you think it's an issue on your end where you didn't fully understand the story, then try re-reading it. You can't review a story without understanding it after all. Also, you don't have to notice every detail or play every branch. I try my best to play every branch but if the story isn't engaging or the choices don't seem to have much value, then I might choose to reach an ending and write a review afterwards. Saying that the story didn't make you feel like wanting to play through every branch for some reason IS a valid critique (Bonus points if you are able to specify that reason).

"Why are we in 7th?" Lol, little penguin I don't know how we aren't in last place. XD

The reviews are a way for you to give your unique perspective and opinion to the author and the community. You should avoid diluting it with info from other featured comments. The issue is that now we have to wonder how much of the content of your reviews comes from actually reading the story, and how much of it is borrowed from the analyses of others.

Ok, I'm going to go ahead and guess you haven't read Death Song then since I can't see that you've rated the game anywhere on your profile and you don't have a review for it in your google doc. Final two questions now. In your review of The Pure, The Vile and The Deadly, you mention that the storygame contains references to Eternal, Rogues, Necromancer and Death Song. 1) What is the reference made in this storygame to Death Song? 2) How do you know of the reference without reading Death Song?

Have you read Death Song yet?