A War Story

A sci-fi storygame by Skylord13

Player Rating?/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"

Based on 6 ratings so far

Story Difficulty2/8

"Walk in the park"

Play Length1/8

"Make sure not to blink"

Maturity Level2/8

"Choking hazard for children under 4"

Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 6. To compare to the movie rating system, this would be G.

Player Comments

-raises finger
-lowers finger
Just, just no.

— Jihelu on 1/4/2014 10:39:52 PM with a score of 0

There were so many things wrong with this game.
1. I learned more about the story in the description than in the game. Not good. If it wasn't for the description, I could have been anybody.
2. Too linear, and too short. There were exactly THREE choices and ONE possible ending in the story. All three of those choices had only two outcomes: "you live" or "you die".
3. Terrible spelling and grammar. At least have another person proofread this story if you can't even use spellcheck. Honestly, if you can navigate the Story Game Editor, you should have the "their/there/they're" concept down.
4. Bad maturity rating. Sure, the death scenes aren't graphic, but I don't think a seven-year-old should be reading about having their face blown off with a gun.
5. Not descriptive, there is no mood created. Am I supposed to feel scared? Angry? Tense? I don't know!
6. Sloppily put together. It looks like you've got an idea, but grew tired of it after the first page and slapped it together in five minutes. At least make it LOOK like you've tried.
I suggest that you do NOT make a sequel unless you improve THIS story.