Player Comments on Blood and Time

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I found the writing to be pretty good but I had no idea what was going on. You switched tenses and you didn't really introduce me to the world of Dragon Age.

Also, the whole insert (Your name ) here was weird and could have been handled better. I think the main things that needed work were the handling of plot, immersion into the world of Dragon Age, and adding branching paths would have helped as well.

Other than that it was an interesting narrative that I wish had more added on to it.

I was heckin bamboozled great job on this one :D

one of this authors better stories but still has it's issues.

This was strange but cute.

Surprisingly good writing but the story needs more development and should be longer. What is written so far is pretty good, though I've never heard of the thing it's based on :)

You started in second person, then halfway through switched to third person.
It's supposed to be LadyHawke/Anders, but I barely interacted with Anders at all.

This was very well written but it seemed like a prologue, a prologue to apparently nothing. It ended too early and needed to branch off more.

Magnificent!

You could've added in a little more filler to stretch the story out longer. Your style was great, and keeping to the dragonage universe is to be expected, but I didn't expect that ending to happen. Maybe you can add in more reactions from the group? After all whenever blood magic is used people go crazy.