Convict: Clive

A mystery / thriller storygame by Bsantalucia22

Player Rating?/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"

Based on 6 ratings so far

Story Difficulty5/8

"Run through the jungle"

Play Length1/8

"Make sure not to blink"

Maturity Level3/8

"Must be at least this tall to play"

Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

Player Comments

What bothers me is that they're all formatted a certain way!
Intro
Option A/B
Option 2A or whatever
End

— Crescentstar on 3/16/2017 11:46:30 PM with a score of 0

If you're in the second grade or so, this is pretty impressive!

If you're any older than that, you really need to work on your punctuation and the like. This doesn't seem to have been proofread very well, and it's such a tiny, tiny amount of text there's really no excuse for that.

Very little actually happens in this story, and how could it when the entire thing is literally less than 1000 words.

If you proofread for mistakes more carefully and wrote out a longer plot with more options and paths this would be a much better story.

Also be careful of point of view switching because this randomly jumps from second to first a couple of times. (You vs I)