Player Comments on Ethically Diverse

This story was fun, entertaining and humorous.

Ethically diverse vs. ETHNICALLY diverse. This story is a good lesson in what can happen if you don't pay attention to detail and spelling. NO, I am not talking about the writing OF this story, which is done well (at least in my opinion). The misunderstanding happened between people in the story and leads to the ensuing drama.

First, I liked the concept of this story and the mix of heroes and villains with superpowers in an office setting. This was written well, and demonstrated good effort by the author to develop both characters and plot. The escalation through office pranks was funny and worked well.

I really enjoyed that the story opened up and provided information more organically through action and dialogue rather than an information dump. In a few places, I personally felt that the dialogue was a little excessive and slowed down the story, but it was humorous and well done and didn't really detract from the overall story.

Where this story truly lacks is in the branching aspect of a CYA. Almost the first half of the story has no choices whatsoever, and even once a choice is introduced it does not really spread out the narrative much. It is much more like a good short story with a few alternate endings.

Overall, this was a fun storygame with several endings to experience. Definitely worth reading.

I'm a sucker for stories revolving around superheroes in mundane, ordinary conflicts. Normally I'm not a superhero fan otherwise, but something about this concept has always been fun.

With that being said, I really enjoyed this story! One spelling slip-up had disastrous office consequences, and the stakes are much higher when there's supes on both sides involved. I thought that these various antics were entertaining, and seeing Matt and Carol clash with their philosophies was interesting.

I will say that sometimes the dialogue digs a little too deep into corporate nitty-gritty for me to really care about. When there's long blocks of these back and forth interactions with nothing to really add some seasoning to the conversation or break things up, I developed a tendency to lose interest and start skimming, and it effectively changed nothing about my understanding of the story.

Additionally I would have enjoyed a bit more agency in the earlier parts of the story. The first half sees the reader basically railroaded to the climax of the conflict, and it's only then that you have a say in how the protagonist can react. I can't help but feel that there were some missed opportunities in branching and character development had the story opened itself up much earlier.

SPAG wise, basically no issues whatsoever.

Overall I think this is a fun story if the subject appeals to you. The long chunks of expository dialogue (that can be a bit excessive at times) might wrestle you for your focus, though, and it would have been nice to start making choices sooner into the conflict. I'll give this a 5/8. Nice job!

I loved the concept from the description, and my opinions for improvement are more character related. Superhero stories are one of my favorite genres, especially in a more urban environment. The more casual workplace antics were fun, and you captured how I'd expect superpowers and coworker dynamics to collide. The dialogue was entertaining, despite some fluff that could be cut. I would have loved to see more depth with each character's actions mixed with their individual voices. I enjoyed reading this, amazing work!

As far as I know, I got every ending.
I loved how there were passages that were the same at the start, but then changed depending on the choices you made. Although it was very linear, I loved the few branching choices that were included. I also loved that this story fit into a favourite series of mine's universe (Renegades if anyone wants to know) and you even made a reference to it although that may have been accidental.

Either way, amazing story!

A fun story for sure! I do wish that there were some more choices, but the writing was phenomenal and I enjoyed every bit of it.

So, I initially thought the title had a typo in it. The reveal on that little clerical error was funny! The premise of story lends itself well to comedy. I didn't notice awkward sentences or spelling/grammar problems. Good job there. You did I great job editing your work.

Adding extraordinary powers to ordinary conflicts can have explosive results. Super powered office spats are great fun. However, I find petty arguments wearisome in ordinary life, and here as well. The long stretches of dialogue didn't do it for me, since nothing of narrative or comedic substance was really said.

I expected more choices where we wander around the office. thank you for not doing that. It would be better in my opinion if the story had branched more earlier, instead of waiting till the end. Overall I'm glad you made this. It's great practice for you. I'm confident your next project will benefit from your work here.

This was fun, I chose the diplomatic route and stayed with Matt and Carol, do hope to see more of your work soon.

There aren't enough choices.

It's a fun idea and I enjoyed this game. but that's a lot of pages with no choices to get through in the beginning.

I like like how the days work, but I wish there were more choices, It's like the game is pulling me to make a decision that had already be decided. If you know what I mean, On the bright side I like the storyline.

played through diplomatically, and it was a fun little story! I will have to come back and see the other branches!