MUT4T10N

This story is unfinished.

Don't be lazy man. Finish stories before you post them.

Don't publish demos.

Also, @snowfall read the maturity level if you're just a kid.

no more bad words!!!!!!!!!!!!! game is great, but if you would quit with the cuss words then i would like it a whole lot more!!! im just a kid!!!!

Demos are bad, unfinished ones are even worse.

Unpublish this, please, and fix that font up; I can't even look at this!

2/8 because I see potential, but I'm not rating it any higher because AYT and STT are correct. It's been stated, several times, that people are not supposed to publish unfinished works with broken (I.E. linkless) pathways. It's irritating to readers.

I think it's a very good concept, I really want to like this story, but the fact that it's unfinished means I can't pick the actions I want and I couldn't reach an ending I was satisfied with. Please. Take it down, finish it, then PM me and I will come back to give it a higher rating.

1/8 because this is no place for demos.

Sorry, but it's not good to post unfinished pieces. The site is for you to take your storygame through the writing process, and you just took it from drafting.

Some positive things I could say about this is somewhere around four. It's a good concept, although I can't get much from the summary you posted, but that's for later. I'm glad you added an informations page to this, that will help a lot.

But one thing's for sure: please do not post demos on here any longer. That just makes the reader uninterested in you story. Take it through the process. Get someone to co-author it. But please, don't post demos. At all.

1/8, 2/8

Sincerely,
At_Your_Throat
(Shoot me a PM if you'd like. It's on me!)