Trumped

Magnificent! 8/8

I didn’t understand what was going on half the time, but I loved it.

i cried at how beautiful this was

As a member of this community with comparably few brain cells, I found this kind of hilarious beneath its obvious stupidity. A light and entertaining little adventure that makes up for its lack of insightful content in randomness.

...Random? A few typos and errors in writing. I'm not sure what else to say, honestly.

Interesting premise for a story, I suppose. The first page doesn’t have a lot of information on it, but there is some kind of error going on with “his way to take crush crazed woman.” Is he taking an Orange Crush to a crazed woman running in the forest? Is the crazed woman actually Klinton? Or is Klinton an actual, physical snake? But hey, at least this man who is slumped over somehow managed to stop the hero in the middle of a path?

I get the battle scene, but I don’t get the battle scene. I mean, I can see that you’re trying to create some imagery and some comedy here with the different items that you’ve included. But the sections are so short they really don’t make any sense. And the options don’t seem to have much of an effect. I mean, that’s nice that it’s not a “pick the wrong random choice and you’re dead,” but I’m not sure “pick either choice because it doesn’t matter” is much better.

The battles were a bit odd, and actually they appear to be, well, the entire story. I appreciate that there were options, but there were also paths that had a series of “click here” options and only one or two lines on the page. If you have four pages in a row where there are no options and just a little text, why not simply combine all those into one page? That would read much better than click, click, click through the story. Or, even better, you could work on expanding those pages so that they have more detail and more information to make them interesting to read.

I understand that it’s a parody game, but even parody games can have good stories in them with clear and vivid descriptions of the actions and the scenery. You could have much more in this story to make it better and more readable and still have all the silliness and a similar story. Thank you for sharing the story with the site.

So the J in Donald J. Trump stands for John? Well, you learn something new every day.

As for the game, I’m afraid it’s seriously lacking in realism. It contained several instances of Donald Trump running… Sorry, but I’m having a hard time picturing it. Change that to him riding around in a golf cart, and it’d be a lot more believable. Also, the game didn’t contain nearly enough scenes of our beloved president insulting celebrities or talking about how much he wants to bang his daughter. Plus the finishing move for Killary was all wrong! He should’ve just grabbed her by the pussy. Everyone knows that thing’s so dried up and crusty that it’d just shatter to pieces with one touch. (At least that was Bill’s excuse to Monica.) In short, this entire game was FAKE NEWS!!!

On to the serious part though… I think this is the one and only instance I’ve seen in a CYS game where the pointless “go left” or “go right” choice actually made any sense, so congrats for that. The humour was decent in places, but I think it could’ve been a lot funnier if it focussed more on political jokes and less on Donald Trump just fighting various politicians.

The game had several spelling and grammar mistakes and could definitely have used a proof read or two. Also, it was kind of weird that most of the time, whenever you made the “wrong” choice, the game just kind of seemed to ignore it and forced you take make the right choice instead. Finally, I think that 90% of the game’s 4/8 play length was just the copy/pasted speech you through in at the end (which seemed completely out of place for a comedy game, and I just ended up skipping anyway.) All in all, the it was a pretty funny premise, but I think you could’ve made it a lot funnier.

This was... odd. I liked it though. Good job!

Interesting story with a nice ending the choices are stellar brilliant though

My Trump game is better. Ha!

But, this one had decent enough grammar. The choices seemed to be mostly linear though.