Adventures of a Cute Cat: A Poem

The idea is certainly novel and ambitious, even if the execution leaves something more to be desired. There aren't really any rules to poetry, but for something like this, some tweaking to make the verses sound more natural rather than shoehorned in would have helped.

Also, it was still too short to really be a storygame, even if it is understandable that the format makes it more forgiveable.

... I'm beginning to think I should start charging folks for unauthorized cameos. ;) (Kidding, the only one I ever really minded was by a certain Spiderman fanboy.) While this combines two lovable things, cats and poetry, I can't rate it very high.

The flow is too awkward. It's not enough to just make the last word of a sentence match up with the last word of another sentence. I've written a lot of rhyming poetry, and its ability to roll off the tongue naturally and keep a consistent rhythm is its true charm.

To accomplish that and make most of a minimalistic form of expression like poetry, careful word selection (quality and quantity) is so, so important. You had extra words where they weren't needed, but in other places, they were sorely missed, and some parts just could've been phrased better. I also noted a few general mistakes. (Like spelling "anger" as "angre")

The content of the poetry is kinda random, which I don't normally find too compelling unless it's very funny or very, very creative.

The length of my play through was acceptable given the format, though you abandoned your rhyme-scheme a bit jarringly less than halfway through the last page of that one. I think you may have gotten caught up in telling the story instead of writing a poem--which, we are here for a story, but if you're going to make a gimmick the main feature _of_ a story, I'd strongly recommend consistency. And if you can't multitask with enough effort given to both, I'd recommend just telling the story straightforward.

That said, I am not calling this bad. It's better than about half the games I've subjected myself to on here, but I'm very fond of poetry and thus, very critical of it. I'd recommend reading/re-reading works like "The Raven" when studying flow--personally, I can't read it without wanting to read aloud because of its rhythm.

You lied to me Negative! At the beginning of the poem, you stated that the cat barked instead of meowing, but later on in the poem, there's a verse that mentions the cat meowing! This game forged of trickery and deceit I tell you!!!

... With that out of the way, it was cute. I thought it was fun that the game was written in the form of a poem, though some of the rhymes did seem a little forced to me, (like the bit where she didn't want change in her life because it would be like walking on a knife. There are other words that rhyme with life you know?) :p

love it! :3

Got the pull out ur claws ending

It lasted for about two minutes. Awful??

Very cute.

This story is cute, funny and fantastic!

:3 cute cat

I LOVE IT