all because of a breakfast sandwich

It was very linear and random, and I had a really hard time understanding what was going on. Like, one moment I was getting gas for my car so I could go get a breakfast sandwich, and then I was with Yoda choosing a lightsaber or something? I got very confused with this.

The lolrandom humor was funny at some points, but then you just overdid it and it wasn't funny, it was just insanely confusing and linear.

It was like something i'd imagine a second grader would write, and you had a lot of trouble sticking to a plot i'd say.

It was also very short, but I did like the writing style and how the chain reaction of wanting a breakfast sandwich caused the storygame.

I also didn't spot much character development throughout this storygame :(

3/8.

A bit too short and has occasional grammar issues, but it’s not that bad. It actually made me chuckle.

tbh i don't really know what happened, i randomly met yoda while trying to get gas for my car, and learned the force then i killed someone and i became evil?

Woah hold on. I wanted to play a game about eating breakfast then you ambush me with a Star Wars fanfiction? Unacceptable. The attempt at humor is ruined because the plot shift I so freaking random I’ve lost interest.

I mean if you want to make a Star Wars game just commit don’t make it a game masquerading as an adventure to get a breakfast sandwich. I don’t want to be a Jedi or a Sith I want my freaking biscuit! Palpatine shows up outta nowhere behind a dumpster while I’m eating my sandwich and Yoda nearly kills me flicking a cigarette at a gas can. Just because your Star Wars fanfic disguised as eating breakfast subverts my expectations doesn’t mean it’s good.

The prequels had more humor than this, and I’m sorry but your two main paths diverge into the same outcome which is just lazy writing. Keep them as two separate paths. The grammar and pictures were fine and I’m sure some people would find this hilarious but I’m not one of them. My suggestion to you would be to write a separate ending for the Jedi and with paths and to not false advertise your game unless the twist is going to be good.

Had you made the adventure twist to getting a breakfast sandwich a well executed idea with some originality behind it I would have enjoyed it. Considerably more than the random Star Wars inclusion but, you did good grammar and wise the narrative just wasn’t compelling and felt misleading.

I have been enlightened.

funny haha hee hee hoo hoo

This story is unexpected and absolutely hilarious! :D I had a lot of fun reading this one

i chose this option because it was bad but not the worst thing i have ever played

Not good, no, but it is not the worst. It is very random. Could you please have at least told us it was this random? I gave it a 3/8 for the many spelling errors. There were a few grammatical mistakes, but not nearly as many as the spelling ones.

I know this was probably made pretty randomly, but whatever, I like reviewing things.

Before I end this I am going to point out all the capitalization mistakes. Edit this, please!

No thank you ask another Hunter lol