Player Comments on all because of a breakfast sandwich

It was very linear and random, and I had a really hard time understanding what was going on. Like, one moment I was getting gas for my car so I could go get a breakfast sandwich, and then I was with Yoda choosing a lightsaber or something? I got very confused with this.

The lolrandom humor was funny at some points, but then you just overdid it and it wasn't funny, it was just insanely confusing and linear.

It was like something i'd imagine a second grader would write, and you had a lot of trouble sticking to a plot i'd say.

It was also very short, but I did like the writing style and how the chain reaction of wanting a breakfast sandwich caused the storygame.

I also didn't spot much character development throughout this storygame :(

3/8.

A bit too short and has occasional grammar issues, but it’s not that bad. It actually made me chuckle.

tbh i don't really know what happened, i randomly met yoda while trying to get gas for my car, and learned the force then i killed someone and i became evil?

Woah hold on. I wanted to play a game about eating breakfast then you ambush me with a Star Wars fanfiction? Unacceptable. The attempt at humor is ruined because the plot shift I so freaking random I’ve lost interest.

I mean if you want to make a Star Wars game just commit don’t make it a game masquerading as an adventure to get a breakfast sandwich. I don’t want to be a Jedi or a Sith I want my freaking biscuit! Palpatine shows up outta nowhere behind a dumpster while I’m eating my sandwich and Yoda nearly kills me flicking a cigarette at a gas can. Just because your Star Wars fanfic disguised as eating breakfast subverts my expectations doesn’t mean it’s good.

The prequels had more humor than this, and I’m sorry but your two main paths diverge into the same outcome which is just lazy writing. Keep them as two separate paths. The grammar and pictures were fine and I’m sure some people would find this hilarious but I’m not one of them. My suggestion to you would be to write a separate ending for the Jedi and with paths and to not false advertise your game unless the twist is going to be good.

Had you made the adventure twist to getting a breakfast sandwich a well executed idea with some originality behind it I would have enjoyed it. Considerably more than the random Star Wars inclusion but, you did good grammar and wise the narrative just wasn’t compelling and felt misleading.

I have been enlightened.

funny haha hee hee hoo hoo

This story is unexpected and absolutely hilarious! :D I had a lot of fun reading this one

i chose this option because it was bad but not the worst thing i have ever played

Not good, no, but it is not the worst. It is very random. Could you please have at least told us it was this random? I gave it a 3/8 for the many spelling errors. There were a few grammatical mistakes, but not nearly as many as the spelling ones.

I know this was probably made pretty randomly, but whatever, I like reviewing things.

Before I end this I am going to point out all the capitalization mistakes. Edit this, please!

No thank you ask another Hunter lol

Great Game! I also love breakfast sandwiches!

LOL! Like the idea of how getting a sandwitch can evolve into a story of a lightsaber fight and jedi! ;D

Hahaha. Quite entertaining, my fav part was when Yoda threw a cigarette into the gas tank. I like the use of pictures throughout the story

Funny but short.

great,i would <3 to see more of this sorta stuff

This was a short and fun game. It's not you get to lay waste to Jedi every day.

Very cute!

You should have rlly went 4 a waffle bruh!

It's funny but the endings can be better

There is one inconsistency, when you walk to Wawa and get a sandwhich and join the sith, then go to the temple, if you don't decapitate your good double it takes you to the same pages you read as the good jedi. Then you either kill him and are approached by sidious (again), or take him to the council even though you are evil.
I like the cool idea of running into your double on either path, but you should change it so that it makes more sense if you join the sith, you can't take the double to the jedi council or be recruited by sidious again.
It was great other wise, I loved it.
"Copied me, you have."

I love the game, It is simple, and somewhat funny.

Enlightening.

It was funny, but I didn't like the endings.

I like it cause the star wars. I mean seriously, who can hate it! :D

Meh. BTW - not based off a true story, man.

All because of a breakfast sandwich I fought myslef, wreked a car and learned yoda smokes . . . Lolz

Where did my sandwich go? I'm sorry, but this story failed my standards because of its lack of deeper meaning. It was extremely unrealistic and linear. One choice was always the "correct" one, and it was even worse because of how obvious the correct choice was.

Other than that, pages were somewhat too short and lacked detail, although the pictures provided part of that. Also, I recommend this go in Fan Fiction because I did not quite understand the concept of the Jedi council. It would help if an explanation is given in the story description. 3/8.

Really Good Game! Can't wait for the great game.

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Everything escalated quickly. o__O

yay! i always wanted to meet Yoda.... yippee!

I was trained under master Yoda, defeated an evil version of my self and was accepted as a knight by the Jedi council... And I still didn't get my damn sammich :p

Real short...

'Malo'

ok

Pretty fun... But pretty short.

it was ok

Interesting...I found it odd how just getting a sandwich resulted in going to Star Wars...but hey, it didn't have too many spelling or grammar mistakes, so I'm happy. I didn't like that you cut it off after I find my double. You shouldn't split it up. It's too short to do that.

Many lols bro, many lols

random

When making a "random" type story people try to make it a little too linear, but you hit the nail head on in randomness. You are the master of random. I suggest you make a longer, more detailed story with many more random descicions. as a sith lord once said... " let the random flow..." lol :)

I decided to play through a few times before rating/commenting. Question: When I turn down the dark dude and go home, why is it a game over? Or, I should say, why am I still hungry? I already ate the damn sandwich, mission accomplished I'd say.

I think you should maybe have some more links, make it a bit less linear, but hey. Not a bad first game

It seems like a good idea for a random story, but you need to make it longer. Other than that i thought it was a nice short story.