Player Comments on Animal Jam Adventure

Although the story is fairly short, I thought it was going to be a regular Warrior Cats story...

...And then I was proven wrong (at least partially). With the lack of explanation as to the "race" (cat/human) at the beginning, I kind of got confused. But, after a little while, I realized they were cats. Surprisingly enough-to whoever is reading this-this is NOTHING like a regular WC story, and cannot be considered (in my opinion) as such. There are no "clans" like in the typical story, no blatant sex scenes, or completely horrible grammar. In fact, the organization, as the well as the grammar are not bad. My only issue is the fact that you spaced (I believe) every sentence, when that wasn't necessary. Also, the story, though there was room for choices and deviation, all of the choices felt kind of vague (with there not being too dialogue per page).

But overall, I don't think it is too bad, and I read it completely to the end, which was pretty decent for a story with this level of content and effort. I think that I'll give it a 5/8: the highest rating I'll give for a fan-fiction even slightly related to Warrior Cats.

Author: You have potential (possibly, since I'm no expert)! I think you can do even better, if you add more "meat" to your stories, and condense your writing more.

It was wonderful! I have never played animal jam before, but I love you choose your story, so fun. I hope you can add more detail into it. Keep up the good work!

Fuck that was such a fucking slog, and I barely skimmed it and just pressed links.

Prolly the warrior cats game with the most plot or something but holy fuck was this annoying and railroading.

If you're still around the site I would recommend, as the kids say, to "get gud" and write an actual story. This warrior cats shit is amazingly gay and no one in their right mind fucking likes it.

No one in their right mind likes you I would bet. I actually hesitated on this last second, but the need for it was confirmed by your fucking username.

Rot in the deepest pits of noobs hell, all the way at the bottom where you will be impaled by icicles for eternity, faggot.

Cool! :D

It was, well, interesting, but it just needs that something you don't know.

This was lovely and fun to read! it reminded me of Animal jam AND Warrior Cats my favorite book! Good Job! Keep up the great work Author! <3

I loved this. It's like in the end your friend still thinks your the best thing. It kind of reminds me to celebrate the last year of school at the start with a hug and a reminder of when I met my best friend :) then we have to move onto high school... I wish we were all going to HE same one.. but in the end we will keep in contact so I'm happy :3

This was great! I may have not been a very good friend through this, I looked through the journal. IMMA PLAY IT AGAIN ;)

This is great! :D

This is awesome!

i have seen literally every path and i know everything there is to know about this yaay pls pls pls do a sequal and buddy me my animal is scooter grandninja (and this panguin i never use and i really never bother switching animals soo yeah) and my username is adrotzu so yeah sequal pls and buddy pls wait you do play AJ RIGHT!?!?!?

I barely find stuff this good on the internet but i was really hoping for phantoms also i can easily predict what the best choice is I intentionally chose the worst choice for a longer path but what this needs most is a sequal (:

CUTE!

I luv this so much!!! Except I have a question... Why does it have Warrior Cats in it? Isn't it an AJ story? And if they were all Warrior cats, why is it in AJ? Anyways, I like the story, I gave it a 6 :3

It was very cute, loved it. :3

I love it some may say it a waste of time but is sweet and fun

I guess I'm a flying animal? Anyway there's a lot of clan members which makes sense see them all the time.

This was so sweet! 8/8 for a job well done <3

The best fanmade version I've seen in years. Love it!

it was okay i guess

Hey, great choose-your-own-adventure! :D I love the ending. It was fun to go through. And I agree with what you said about the Clan members, no offense to anyone! ;) Great story!

I love it! How do you make these?

SO COOOL!

Nice

Yo! This is amazing! Good Job FANG!

I LOVED IT! MY NAME IS MY REAL AJ USER! SEND ME GIFTS I DO MAILTIME EVERYDAY!

Beautiful ;.; Just perfect :3

Beautiful friendship story. I love AJ so much! You inspired me! I want to make an animal jam storygame now! I'll leave a shoutout, too! However, you did kinda make clan roleplayers look a little cruel. Otherwise, it was stunning.

wow just wow. ive never seen a fan made game of aj before. its so reaistic!

That was touching... I love it :)

TO EASILY DONE

It will bring enlightment to you.

not incredible

Dear authoer, Your story was entertaing !
Though , it is more like a book without pictures then a animal jam fan made game . I enjoyed how teensy saved the Egyptian thing and all but I would like to see a story made about hacking or scamming accounts on animal jam ! Ty have a great day btw im the one who scammed you that one day hue >:) Bye!

Nice job! I play An so this brought me enlightenment!

I LOVED IT.It's so nice and so thought out.

Pretty good!
My AJ username is myanimerocks

I love this storygame alot! I play animal jam, too.

Hey, that sounded like something i did on animal jam!
Does anyone else play? I'm horselove1812.

I loved this! No edits to be made, Good Job!
-Icestorm

Is this animal jam or warrior cats or something else? What is this? It uses places and names of animal jam but it uses words like kitty pets and clan cats

I love animal jam and I love this story

oh my gosh love it!

That was really cute! I loved it!

Wow, super cute :) Would play a sequel

Wow that is really fun and now I want to play AJ!!!!!!

it's kinda good, but why did some aj characters call me a kittypet? this isn't warrior cats, plus your all twolegs, playing a game, and yes i know some people on aj roleplay but really? kittypet? why not mousebrain? or foxdung? plus aj animals dont have stamina, also an eagle most likely wont run out of stamina from flying for about a minute.

This is a great game! :3

that was so cool!

What is this a fanfic of?
I think I'm a bird, since I fly and can peck, but other characters refer to me as a "kittypet?"

Err... It's ok... But why are the clan cats acting like humans? You obviously don't know about Warriors at all. Please don't take this comment badly, I'm just picky. Besides the whole clan cats thing, it was a pretty good game.
P.S I play animal jam too.

It's alright, but how the fuck did I turn into an eagle?

Great but too short

didn't wanna use my real name on it...too personal. LOVE IT!

Nice story!

This was a good story well written. It could do with more options as the game seemed quite linear at times. But all in all a good game.

I play aj, and i thought this was a very fun Adventure game. I also read warrior cats, and i like how the author incorporated them into the story. Because, honestly how they are in this story is just like how they are in aj..

cool

You write very well. This was well written and entertaining. It was pretty linear, so I think you should have told us that it was more story than game, but otherwise it was pretty good. 5/8.

Really nice, but completely linear. It would be better if you stated that it is more story than interactive with the reader. Still a good read

AMAZING

Linear. I'm too lazy to write any more.

Epic! Love it. :D