Player Comments on Dog Day
Before the story even starts, the author tells me not to expect anything too great. Usually when this is the case, the work feels incomplete and I end up wasting about two minutes controlling a character I genuinely could not care less about. But, lo and behold, this is actually good!
The most glaring 'flaw' of this storygame is, obviously, that it is admittedly quite short, but that doesn't immediately make it bad or not worth reading. When you judge it for what it is, and not what it could've been, this is all around a solid piece of writing that I'm glad I read (a few times). Simple setting, simple goals- don't get shot to death. I can appreciate that.
The 'edgelord' parts can be pretty quickly identified, especially if you plan on pursuing multiple different paths. It's impressive to see multiple different endings (and corpses) packed into just over three thousand words, and I'm positive that any true edgelord would join me in appreciating that. When comparing this to other short stories I've read, this one is definitely one of the few that stand out, because it's actually well written. Good descriptions (some were gross, but hey, that's to be expected!), proper spelling and grammar, and it was overall satisfying to survive. Plus, I get to kill people. Poor butcher never stood a chance.
I do wish there was more context behind the plot, but I can just cross my fingers that this gets a sequel or maybe an update, but hey, even if it doesn't, this isn't an unsatisfying read all by itself by any means. Would I like to know more about what happened after my successful escape? Sure. Is it a requirement? No, not really.
Overall, this isn't your greatest work, but it's still good and an enjoyable read (maybe not if you have a weak stomach). A fine addition to the seemingly quite new Dark Fantasy category.
on 3/15/2021 6:06:23 AM with a score of 0
While this game is very short, the variety of routes is pretty fun to read through and if you have twenty minutes to kill it’s worth your time.
-The game is extremely non linear and has a variety of different options of what to do (hiding, fighting, getting people to distract the guards)
-The description of the gore is good
-The premise for the story is pretty simple and gets straight to the action with an interesting hook: perfect for dumbasses like me
-The game has good grammar, as far as I can tell..
Things to improve:
-While the game is non linear, it has a lot of bad endings. The only good ones I found consisted of hiding in a ton of meat hooks in some weird orc butchers, threatening a little girl to earn her silence and just trying to run away as much as possible. All the others end with your gruesome death.
-Occasionally the pace seemed really rushed, but that might just be because this is a short game.
-We get little snippets of worldbuilding, this game seems like it should be the start of a larger story. Why is your friend dead? Why did the deal go wrong? Why does the Orc speak like every British person ever? We’ll never know.
-Some of the non-gore descriptions are a little lacklustre.
on 3/10/2021 10:38:42 AM with a score of 0
This story-game is very frantic. That is meant in a positive way, as it's written well, and while it is indeed short, there's more than two or three ways that it can end when all is said and done.
If it was just a tad longer, this would feel like one of those extended thrillers of a movie, or multiple scenes of said hypothetical movie. As it stands now, it's an intense story where the main character does some morally questionable things in the name of their unrepentant survival.
Nice work, Chris.
on 2/7/2021 1:51:12 AM with a score of 0
That was short, but still fun. Like this comment! Easy pointless point!
on 4/5/2021 1:19:54 AM with a score of 0
Liked that the character is a true low down criminal it feels very raw. Did not like the loose story telling felt very disconnected sometimes. (Had to read this because the title and story reminded me of the flawed masterpiece Kane and Lynch 2: dog days),
on 3/30/2021 7:57:28 AM with a score of 0
Damn, bro. Why you gotta tease us with excellent writing in such a short, rushed game. I suppose I could just take the game for what it is, but it leaves me wanting more. This bit, though enjoyable, would be more effective with more depth and context.
on 1/31/2021 10:58:34 AM with a score of 0
Always a cool idea to explore a few pathways that can lead to a continuation or a sought after death. I liked the bit of the story both included and excluded.
on 1/30/2021 6:30:26 PM with a score of 0
Decent little action scene, gauntlet style. Writing and story were good, just short. It was entertaining though and would fit well in a larger story.
on 1/30/2021 4:24:42 PM with a score of 0