Player Comments on Family Impact on Relationship Conflict

So this was a research paper disguised as a choose your own adventure game. While this is a creative idea in concept it was boring for someone like me to read and could have been executed in a much more interesting manner.

The thesis on the stories description page, the In text citations and the references page reminded me of school which I’m not bashing school but wouldn’t of have been easier to just put this on a PowerPoint? This seems like a story to intended for a smaller audience and I can imagine the only person who took the time to read all of this was your teacher.

The actual research subject itself was interesting enough but it doesn’t compute with a site where people are looking for stories to distract them from things like school not remind them of it. other than that the overall quality of writing was fine it just wasn’t interesting to read.

Sigh... it’s so boring, and the plot is so dull. It seems like a modified school assignment. I played through one of the three paths and didn’t do the other two... that’s not a good thing. And no, I didn’t read the large block of text at the end of the path, because that definitely looks like a school assignment.

I suppose it was okay, and there was effort there, but storygames are supposed to be fun. 2/8.

It's all right, but I prefer this game as an exploration of the impact of family: https://chooseyourstory.com/story/viewer/default.aspx?StoryId=8035

It's not really a game it's more of an educational text in storygame format. For what it is, I guess it's okay. I feel like I'm reading a psychology textbook or something.

I'm sure it's filled with good intentions but it is one of the most boring stories that could exist on this site.

As exciting and fun as the title promises.

There's nothing actually wrong with this, it just doesn't seem like it should've actually been published. You can share games with people you know just from your profile.

Family Marriage Systems Theory? Therapy?
This looks like it was written by more than one person so I’ll leave a comment for each major branch. I’m also going to review very quickly in an effort to (maybe) get this out in time for you all to make some corrections if I find any.

Somewhere along the way, your family will become a major influence on your life and will ultimately impact the way you navigate conflict in the future.

What do you mean “your family will become?”
The first four years are extraordinarily important to our overall socialization. We learn what is considered friendly, how we should communicate, how we articulate as people wholesale. Family immediately impacts us, it influences us from the very beginning. It cannot be stressed enough, the foundation is set well before the age of ten. One should instead say that “family will continue to influence…”

It would probably be wise to give readers context BEFORE choosing an orientation, and not after. On the other hand, I’m not really the intended audience am I? Therefore, I recommend a grain of salt.

(Conformity Orientation)
Scenario 1 is written in a very awkward way. Perhaps, “... also, we’re already preparing a family dinner. Now, go and finish your homework. That’s the final word.”

I see that all of these are written a little strangely in an effort to frame the situation more fully.

I was really intrigued by what I thought this project was going to do. It didn’t meet my expectations at all. I thought we were going to see a theoretical development of an individual's conflict resolution skills based on how conflict, values, and power dynamics were handled at home. Instead we see only short term results which are merely situational. We are not really seeing the impact of different conversation orientations. Past choices don’t affect us down the road, all the paths for Conformity Orientation lead to the same two endings. This does not demonstrate how your upbringing and family influences your behaviour and the way you handle conflict in your romantic relationships. This is a binary choice simulator. That’s a shame because the editor could absolutely handle that kind of project.

What this does is let you make some choices. Then at the end we are informed as to whether those choices were conforming or non-conforming. That’s nice at least. My problem here is with the claim:

“This storyline illustrates how conformity orientation in families can impact the way adult children handle conflict in their romantic relationships.”

No it doesn’t.

(Conversation Orientation)
Writing in this branch needs an additional proofreading. No hyphen after the five and the following sentence is in need of urgent repair, “You washed yourself and walk into kitchen to grab a breakfast and you father asked,”

Okay, actually all the sentences are imperfect. However, your english is better than my German or Arabic; so who am I to judge?

I really like how you framed the question at the end. That is a strong choice. Nice job. And you followed it up with a situation where the impact on the character is demonstrated. Great!

This segment demonstrated how observing a communication pattern in one situation can affect how we react in a different environment. I would have liked significantly more interaction but I think that the execution of what is here is nice.

(Family Structure)

Your English is quite good assuming it isn’t your first language. There is much more narrative here than in the other branches. This is, I think, partly due to the subject matter. Still, I do not feel that the subject was properly explored. The choices we made did not actually influence anything that would later happen. The claim is made, “The storyline you followed is designed to show how family structure and sibling relationships during early adolescence could impact romantic conflicts in adulthood.”

This is not achieved. For example, deliberately choosing the negative conflict resolution styles still achieves the same end as choosing the positive ones. If anything this story suggests that nothing matters except your last choice. As long as the last choice is made positively we see the following text, “one possible factor is the positive conflict resolution methods you witnessed growing up which is associated with a low commitment level in relationships among young adults.” That text is attempting to trick us into believing that our choices mattered and we learned something about how family influences our development.

You have a nice writing voice and I liked your joke about athleticism and chess.