Player Comments on From McDonalds to Home

i won! :D i only found it weird that you win f you pick the "bad guy" ending.

O...kay.

Lol I'm trapped in mcdonalds forever!! D:

Okish

I don't know what to say

I think that I lost brain-cells while playing this.

This game reminded me of most of the other games on CYS: Bad grammer, spelling, and dumb plot. However, there was one thing that set it aside from all the others. It was actually longer than short, which still isn't saying very much. But the plot made no sense: the police quarinteening people inside mcdonalds in anticipation of a terrorist attack. It reality the police would shut down mcdonalds while trying to track down the person who threatened to do the attack. 5/8

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Bluefur, there's a hell of a lot of 1/8 stories on the site, like 'Cross-breeding' and the more recent 'Dont die'.

Wow, first 1/8 rated Storygame I ever saw on this site.

The story made no sense at all but the idea of trying to escape a terrorist siege would make a good puzzle or thriller story-game. I'd recommend planning a plot, putting in some named characters and maybe making it in some way realistic?

No.

Meh.

I feel like this was inspired by "The Hunt For Cake" (Which was my first story on my really old account), considering the line "But two terrorists 'accidentally' shoot you", like the line in The Hunt For Cake, "The guard 'accidentally' breaks your neck", and several other similarites, like being hungry and having two options, one of which leads to you starving to death and having a link saying "Second Chance" rather than "retry". And having the name "Ihavea Fartz" similar to "Whet Fartz"... But that's about all the similarites I can think of.

But anyways, this wasn't very realistic, like I get 5 years of prison for running around and saying I was some random dude? You're kidding, right? Honestly, this is a mehish start, but keep writing, and some day you'll be great. 2/8

Anyway, bleh...

Lol McDonald's is pretty much my neighbor. I live right next to one :P

1. No reason for this
2. Very bad
3. Grammar Errors
4. It was Horrible
5. Engage on this
6. Spend more time on this
7. I predict this was made in about 5 Minutes

Spend more time on your storygames. I bet this could be a lot better if you work about an hour or at least a day on this.
1/8

Wow.
1/8

... Not well written and my ending was barely comprehensible.

Its so short and theres nothing to it. I retried a few times and sometimes you die the second you enter. Next time make it more interesting!