Player Comments on Highschool

The story was too short. I feel like it was a good idea at first but came out terribly in writing. The choices make little sense and this is one of those storygames that makes you go back if you don't pick the right choice. These are the worst and most annoying storygames to play and it's tedious to get through so that I can rate and comment. Changing this can help get more reviews and ratings so that you can have better feedback to improve your writing.

The plot wasn't very good, and that is also linked to the choices. It seemed a little random as well, and I wouldn't recommend this to anyone unless I had no other options. This could certainly be improved and become one of the better storygames on the site. It could at least be moved into the better half.

Overall, it's a storygame lacking important qualities and I have no better option but to rate it very low. 1/8, needs work.

Unlike some people I actually read this thing carefully before rating. For instance ThisisBo, the very first line says that "You're a girl named Katie" If thats not telling the readers that the protagonist is a female from the very beginning then I dont know what is. There were very few typos, which is realy rather rare for a game that was made so quickly. The story also had a good amount of humor, or at least I think it did. With all that said there are some short comings. First the story itself is too linear. each time I played it I either got the best possible ending or it started me over. Additionally the game is to short. In the future try to have more pages, more words per page, and more links per page. The other thing I would suggest is having several endings, and I dont mean, "oops you lost" endings either.

Sooo hard

Too Short.And I don't know what you want to express...

fuck jake

the game seemed to take drastic turns in some choices but overall a really good game in my opinion.

what the actual f**k

yES the best games ever

The plot itself is good, but the story's pretty short. Onthe whole, I'd say, good job!

I wish the story would have more detail

I ain't wanna be popular and who the hell is Paige or whatever her name is

can you make a part 2 of this?please

awful

Too short

ehhh it was cool but maybe add more of what we call highschool in it

I thought it was simple, but kind of cute. Good job!

Meh. Definitely easy to lose, and unentertaining.

boring

Cool kinda fun

Ha, Ha! This book was really funny but I'm a boy!??
Make more stories like this but have a boy character sometimes be the chooser, please.

Way to short and need of the story.

i liked it but ive heard better. to me it was short. fast love ya know?

It is good and bad at the same time

I HATE IT

It was really 2 short for me and i expected more DRAMA!!!!

That was good! I liked it, this was actually better than the second story. One thing I was annoyed about was that the choice of when you vet to school was only limited to following a random person for you to continue with the story. Keep writinv, don't let the bad comments get you down! 4/8

I loved the story but maybe make it longer?

It was a twist of other things I am playing.

TOO SHORT

Well, I’m insane lol

There are too many dead ends and not a lot of possibilities. It works fine as a very short story but I wish they branched out more.

That is a really fun game. LOVE I

OMG my name is katie and this ACTUALLY happened to me in real lifE!! XD XxRAWRxX

SO ROMANTIC, (IN A WEIRD WAY)

i thought it was romantic

Noice

Short and to the point. Also I had a hilarious ending. Really enjoyed it

too short and many spelling mistakes.

I loved this! Maybe you could make it a little longer but rather than that it was good! maybe have more endings too because it's either best ending possible or restart. Nice job though!

I hate How some choices lead you back to a previous part

*gives two enthusiastic thumbs up*

I think this is a good story but a lot of the time you get grounded or have detention which is a bit annoying. Overall, this is great. Keep up the great work :)

Grounding isn't akin to death-- it doesn't stop your life in its tracks. It makes things more difficult, but you still have to go to school after. And frankly, if an option is just going to lead to a dead end instantly on the first page, it really shouldn't be there.

This actually wasn't that bad at all. There were lots of different routes - once you got past the beginning segment, that is. I found those parts pretty satisfying, and it's fun once you actually reach the good ending.

Up to that point, unfortunately, it can be a bit frustrating. You shout at your brother, you're grounded and game over. You come home with a guy, you're grounded, game over. You wear the wrong uniform, your mum grounds you (???) and...game over. Yeah.

Well, anyway. I liked it but it can certainly be improved.

This is really boring and it sucks really really really BAD!

Fun! I got the best ending possible yay ^_^ a good storygame!

Alright.

I can't stand these stories that make you restart if you don't follow a path the authors wants. Kind of defeats the purpose of a CYOA. Either finish the path to a satisfactory ending, even if it's a "death" ending, or cut that path completely.

it was good...

COOL

I don't know about this one.... What about Greg? I just LEAVE him broken hearted? And then Jake becomes a football player? I have everything I want (great ending though btw) but my best friend is just left there... Other than that great game cute story!

It was good, not amazing but it was entertaining none the least. A few errors in grammar and spelling but otherwise it was pretty fun.

this hit too close to home

So cool! There is many endings to get, but not the best high school game I've ever played...

Very close minded but still good. Nice writing, decent length, not too difficult. I got the best ending too. 5/8

BUT DID JAKE STILL CHEAT ON HER WITH HALEY THO??? I NEED TO KNOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

this game is catering to preps only, this is a very judgemental game. rude.

It's kind of boring and linear.. Maybe you could've added more branches.

very cute, short and simple

awesome

this game is so lame. iwas looking for a realistic high game and i got the opposite of that.

YOU GET NO CHOICE WHAT SO EVER


there is one option on every page that lets you move the story along

with all the others you either go back to the page before to start the whole game all over

Random choices.

I got the best ending... Or it said I did

It was cool. I failed once and then got the best ending short after. ;)

Umm.. random, so yeah

kool

I severely disliked how there was no real choice in the matter. Everything pointed in one direction and if Ichose anything different I had to start all over.

It was pretty good although maybe it should be longer.

It was pretty good!I loved it!

I was expecting Greg to be a good guy. LOL

good job! But I should have chosen Jake lol, Greg made me insane

That's fun

Nice! Really showed the scope of things there. Also, love the whole notes thing.

coooool

Pretty good but not very Many ending options

Oh my goodness this is my favourite!!

okay but more action?

What's wrong with tryin' ta look tough!?!?! XD

YAY

no words, like sacrifice really?

Boring

i love it i got the greatess neding ever

This story leans far too heavily to the idea high school is a failure unless you are a cheerleader (or a friend of theirs) and dating sports players.

I litterally ran away, followed random people, and threw stuff at Greg.

Poor grammar, very stereotypical. Bad.

Poorly writing.. A Mix of "me" and "you" from first person story to 3rd... Also it was weird..

Paige is my BFF irl lol

Pretty cool. I got the best ending. :D

Pretty fun:) good short and sweet game to play, enjoye, got the best ending. :3

I thought it was pretty good. Ha! I loved the fact that I went crazy at the end! that was and interesting surprise!:)

...it's a bit too random...

Got the one that said best ending

i would assume this is a joke but its not funny enough to be one. but it has to be cause if this is a serious attempt at entertainment it is a major fail. besides the uninspired writing(i use the term writing loosely in this stories case) the ending is forced and the content is shallow.

At the beginning, you give us three choices and only one works, then you give us three more choices and only one of them -really- works out... getting grounded is game over, (*sigh* Which I guess makes sense?) and the endings I found just...are not worth the effort. >_> Seriously, best ending is dating a football player and BFFs with a cheerleader? As someone who often says I do not believe in clichés... even _I_ feel like this is cliché.

This is a really nice story! It's short and simple. That's fantastic as your first story! Keep up the great work! :) Great for beginners

Well, it wasn't bad, but I just didn't like the whole highschool cliche of "You'll be happy if you make friends with the popular girls and get the best looking guy in school to go out with you."

Aw, a lot of the decisions sent you back to the beginning. I wish there was a bit more detail but I think there was room for potential ;)

...what? Pretty dull really. Sorry, it sounds rude but this game really wasn't fun. First day at school, random guy passes you notes, random guy 2 talks to you, random guy 2 asks you out, random girl invites you to mall, woo.

It's weird and unrealistic and boring.

As the 'best ending' is being popular with a football player boyfriend, it kinda gives the message that you need to be popular to be happy.

Not all goths are like that. I'm pretty gothic and I don't do sacrifices to the devil and junk. In fact, I'm Christian! A lot of my friends are goth too, and they're not like that either. So yeah, I find this offensive

What? It was alright, but like the person said below me, you were kinda forced into decision making. You essentially herded your readers into one outcome when you had the possibility for more. Next time try a bit more.4

Haha. Funny.

o_O

It wasn't terrible, it just felt like an average movie to me. It had a happy ending, which in of itself isn't bad at all, but the whole "I have a BFF and Jake became a football player" kind of seemed forced. Other than that, not bad.

4/8

cool.

This felt like a reading of your life story. I'm not sure why, I just get that feeling. I wish my choices had more impact on the outcome of the game. I feel like I kept getting redirected until I picked the option you wanted me to pick. I did not like how random some of the situations seemed to be. Greg seemed perfectly nice, but I ended up randomly making out with Jake in my bedroom and letting him (a total stranger) stay the night at my house? No thanks.

It was okay, but kind of choppy and a bit random.

I recomend this to everybody. I got the best ending possible! It was awsome.

I thought it was alright. In a few pages the perspective on the story changed, it went from "you, to "I" which threw me off a bit.

Then there's the fact that a guy I randomly met on the first day of school came into my room while I was sleeping at night and made out with me.

Yea...that was weird...

It was unrealistic.

Sorry, didn't like it very much. My character was forced into a bunch of different situations. Knowing that my character went to the nerdy table and basically caused the game to say "nerds? lame" without even getting the chance to pick up a hardcore D&D player or something rather saddened me. That's the reason everybody plays this game, right? Specifically to pick up a nerd or two? Yes.

I'm afraid I didn't like it at all 3/8. Also, you might want to include the fact that the protaganist is a female from the beginning, its not a huge thing but it helps your readers be a little less irritated.