Player Comments on Merry Christmas, Tamara!

This would've been a decent Christmas storygame if it included more detail at the beginning and a small problem.

So, let's start with detail. I can tell this takes place in a snowy field of sorts? And Tamara and her friends are wolves or dogs. It would've been nice to introduce us to things like a cave scene, them begging Tamara to come outside and play with them, and then somebody throwing a snowball at Tamara. Then, we would get a sense that Tamara hates Christmas, if that was the route you were going for.

Now, let's move on to the small problem. Tamara hates Christmas. Maybe something happened on Christmas one day that made her hate it. A small conflict like that can help drive the story into a solution on how her friends can make her like Christmas again.

Overall, I will have to admit, this was a nice short story, but details and a conflict that is resolved would've been nice as well. 4/8.

— AestheticLlama on 11/19/2020 7:08:03 AM with a score of 0

I rated this a 2 out of sympathy for your effort. I would explain why this is so awful but I couldn’t be bothered,

— 325boy on 10/6/2020 5:29:37 PM with a score of 0

... What a strange bunch of names your friends have.

— Avery_Moore on 7/14/2020 12:34:03 PM with a score of 0

it was cute

— Kytty on 6/10/2020 4:33:26 PM with a score of 0

Wait...what? This is confusing, and this story should have something like an intro. Who is Levi, Tamara, etc.? This would have been quite good if it was part of a bigger storygame.

— stargazer on 8/31/2018 8:38:07 PM with a score of 0

Nice

— Marneptunez on 2/2/2018 4:55:47 PM with a score of 0

Not thrilled. Spelling/grammar are really bad. Story's too simple and brief. Not worth the time. Sorry. :(

— Quorrah on 1/11/2017 8:19:29 PM with a score of 0

VERY SHORT. Seemed more of a set up for a bigger story. The writing isn't too bad and I'm sure we would have gotten to know the characters better had the story been longer.

— BigRonn77 on 11/28/2016 8:19:09 AM with a score of 0

Easy as pie.

— CurseOfTime on 2/29/2016 5:52:04 PM with a score of 0

Morale of the story: when it doubt blame everyone until someone panics and confesses :D

— Will11 on 5/27/2015 1:37:39 AM with a score of 0

I have to agree with Swift. You have no idea who these characters are, which makes this game less fun. It was also very obvious and easy to solve. There was a broken link too, which really shouldn't be happening in such a short storygame.

It was a good concept, but it could have been executed better. The small amount of writing that was there was well written, but I couldn't help but feel that this sort of puzzle should be a small part of a much bigger storygame.

— 31TeV on 10/10/2014 3:28:29 AM with a score of 0

Not bad, except that I couldn't keep track of everybody.

— Christian_Writer on 12/29/2013 8:14:03 AM with a score of 0

Simple, not bad keep it up.

— Firewing on 12/10/2013 4:02:30 PM with a score of 0

Everything was good...besides the fact I have no idea who they are.

— Swiftstryker on 12/9/2013 2:13:49 AM with a score of 0