Rise of Vollund

No item system, (other than writing stuff down, defetes the online thing a bit, don't you think,) this leads to just spamming the most power full move you have and one shoting everything. The game is also very linniar, the few puzzles that there are (hint, click the only link that doesnt say die(yes that was a joke refering to the ball and rope scene)) bad at best. As a whole your game has a good fell to, you just need to use the adanvced editor and more branches to the story to make it less story and more game. Speaking of the story, it was poorly writen. Try to make me love the world I'm trying to defend and realy hate the vollund. Or give me somthing, not just "do this" and them be like "cool you win!"'

I didn't like it that much. Was it too hard to put items in the game? Instead, you have to write down everything you have on a piece of paper. The author doesn't even give you something to list your stats, he doesn't even bother to tell you your stats on the actual page! I mean really, was it too hard to put in an item that says stats with no picture and lists your stats? Also, how come the fonts of the text always change? One second, I'm reading the text perfectly fine, the next. Have to hold the tablet close to my face to see! And at the start of the game, the end of the third paragraph says "if you crawl through, goto the next paragraph." What was the point of that? Are you supposed to crawl through a hole in real life? There's not even a link that says "crawl through the hole". Just the next paragraph, and there was no point to it. I rated it a 3/8 because I'm in a good mood today, and the author at least put effort into making this. I hope the sequel is better, or I'm rating it even lower.

It was a fun idea for a game, but it seemed like you were just making it up as you went along than carefully planning the game and all the routes you can take. I think a story like this really needs the advanced editor to work. In an online story game, you shouldn't really need to keep a note of the items in your inventory when you could just, you know... have an inventory. Plus right at the beginning, there was a bit where it said "If you crawl through, go to the next paragraph." I really didn't understand the point in that. Why not just give us the option below of crawling through instead of putting it on the same page. Plus on one page there was a "hint" which wasn't so much a hint of just outright telling us what to do, and I just don't see the point in giving us two choices if you're going to tell us what choice to make. I'm sure your games will get better, but try to work on character depth, descriptive surroundings and getting used to the advanced editor.

Didn't really like it. Just ended up spam clicking random buttons to get to and end. Wouldn't play again.

There were some grammar and spelling errors, the dialogue was awkward, I have no idea who that guy that showed up halfway through was, and I shouldn't have to write down what I have.
Please learn how to use the advanced scripting that allows you to add items in the game.
2/8 Because at least it sounded interesting.

Noice

Well, it is too short even for a first play. Hopefully the sequel will be much longer. Thanks!
"The City is safe. You go to the throne room and the king congratulates you. They repel the attack and the creatures of the forest are banished. You have beat this game. This is my first game thanks for playing. A sequel will come out soon."

Nice game if there are like an inventory list like some of the other games. You know what I mean?

Really not horrible, but needs work.

1. Have a page that links to your current inventory or reformat the game with the new inventory mechanic.

2. Give more details, the environment feels very empty.

3. Give the reader more control, it feels like you (the author) is playing the game and the reader is a spectator.

4. Keep writing!

Actually surprising interesting game where i earn items, defeat monsters, and level up without me even knowing why? LOL! But it is interesting to play non-the less. ;)