Player Comments on Strangely High school

I don't feel that this really captures the angle - new student at a high school - you were going for. It's rather short, and lacks detail, character, plot, etc. It's an okay start to a story, but I would love to get to know more characters, have more choices, have a longer story, and have more of a plot.

Way to short.
No real hook.
A good first story, to learn the basics. Keep trying.

Good start, ending was rushed. Short. I'd develop it more.

Oh, well that was short.. But I liked what you had going on. Continue writing perhaps?

I thought this story would be longer

The story is pretty short, light read. The only character that seemed interesting was Sarah, but you never get the chance to meet her. (Or at least in my play-through). My ending was satisfactory, but I feel like the title of this story should've been "Strangely High School Morning", given the timeline that the story takes place.
Definitely could be better.

I was activly searching for more, looking for another ending, looking for anything in the game to have any sort of importance or point to even existing, and found none. This isn't long enough, detailed enough, or well told in a good enough way. It needs to be better to work as an actual thing on the site.

I understand that you were meaning to create a story with elements of school, but what I turned out with had no features except for when I bumped into the punk girl.

Being lazy's one thing, but rushing your stories is a bad idea in general. Please don't do this. I'm telling you from experience, although, you won't know that.

It was a tad bland, if you added more details like "what does the school look like?", "what time is it?", "what's my whole schedule?"....I can go on and on and on. What you're making the reader imagine is a blank high school with blank-faced people and one giant room.

Please, please, please, PLEASE unpublish this for rewriting purposes. This is constructive criticism. Do not take this the wrong way as I have watched many others, including myself, fall down the wrong path.

Thank you for taking the time to read this.

---At_Your_Throat

A short summary of a really great game! It could though, be longer, at least for the path that I chose. 5/8

sums up my highschool experience quite well

16 pages does not a story make :) I like the cooking recipe description (slight humour and the tiniest dash of romance) but the humour was so slight and the romance so dashingly fast both largely eluded me. Your story does what it says on the misnamed tin (Strangely High School? Is that a place?) and describes a first day at a new High School. Ok. What would be good now are named characters and a plot of some kind to hook us and drag us into the story.

I quite liked your writing style, the spacing out and tension is good and builds up some atmosphere. But we need a challenge for us (get through the day without embarassing ourselves despite frequent crises like urgently needing the bathroom in the middle of an exam, letting the classroom rat out of it's cage by accident or accidentally covering the teacher's handbag in paint and having to replace it before she notices it are all examples of challenges).

It's good writing practice but I would recommend planning out your story a little more so you know where it's going and why.