The very short tale of Bara

Player Rating3.84/8

"#497 overall, #48 for 2013"
based on 119 ratings since 08/04/2013
played 524 times (finished 89)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level2/8

"choking hazard for children under 4"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 6. To compare to the movie rating system, this would be G.

This is a very, VERY short story game about a spirit called Bara. Whom you direct. In this short tale, Bara explores an old forest, trying to find another spirit. Only you can help her find it.

Player Comments

I had to read the first sentence at least four times trying to understand “resides many beings live a life.” I’m just not sure what that’s supposed to say there. There’s also a lot of commas in the first two sentences and beyond. In fact, there’s so many commas on that first page that it is actually difficult to read in some ways. Each time I see the comma I pause, and that’s a LOT of pauses in just the first page.

Overall, though, this was an excellent story! I really liked this story. There were a couple of minor typos and errors, but nothing major. The story itself was nice and creative. The setting was described enough to really get me into the story. I also really appreciated the different options and choices. There were a number of different endings, and not just pick the right choice or die endings. While the story is short, I agree with the other reviewer that mentioned that this really is a complete story. This could be used as a good model for other stories on this site that want to be brief: it has a start and various endings. It has a good setting and characters that change. Thank you for sharing this one with the site, it really is excellent.
-- Ogre11 on 6/29/2018 1:28:58 PM with a score of 0
Honestly, I found this storygame to be really good in quality, but obviously there's a large lacking in quantity.

Your good writing is really what saved this storygame from getting removed, i'd guess, because there really wasn't much else that was good about this storygame besides that.

The branching wasn't anything to be proud of, since there was barely any of it. Of course, it's understandable that you can't add too many paths in a very, VERY short storygame.

This isn't the kind of thing i'd read twice, or recommend to anyone else, but it's still pretty good. Just not great.

Some of the paragraphs could have been split up better, and spaced out more. At times there were just big blocks of text.

A good three minutes of reading, I guess? 3/8.
-- MinnieKing on 9/4/2017 9:20:50 PM with a score of 0
This story is very underrated. Regardless of length, the story is complete. In one way, the lack of length is a strength. You packed allot of good into a small package. Your word choice was also very appropriate for the story, great job. An enjoyable bite-sized snack. 6/8
-- ugilick on 6/16/2013 10:27:16 PM with a score of 0
-- Jakethebro on 2/13/2018 7:01:11 PM with a score of 0
Wow. This is a beautiful storygame and has the kind of atmosphere of one of Grimm's Fairy Tales. Although short, there are quite a few options of where to go with some very unique options. I was quite surprised at all the different endings available.

All in all, a really good job and definitely one of the more unique stories on this site.
-- Saika on 3/17/2017 1:03:54 PM with a score of 0
I liked the story, there's a certain kind of simplicity to all of this that makes it very enjoyable to read-- especially in a short amount of time.
-- Bomberman101 on 2/11/2017 8:00:59 PM with a score of 0
Cuthe, short story.
-- Quorrah on 1/17/2017 5:39:55 PM with a score of 0
Great and interesting.
-- Jimmysutton on 4/6/2016 11:55:50 AM with a score of 0
I found the story really compelling and well written (despite having gotten a depressing ending). Good job, keep it up!
-- Vilsia on 3/26/2016 8:02:27 AM with a score of 0
This story was very descriptive and detailed even though it was pretty short. Good job. 7/8
-- Zaguiza14 on 12/8/2015 6:31:16 PM with a score of 0
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