Player Comments on World War 2

I think this was a decent effort at an attempt for a serious historical war game. I take it that showing the horrors of war were the main objective of this piece, and for the most part, the writing was adequate enough to portray that.

Even the best ending cannot really be considered that. The protagonist is still left both physically and quite mentally scarred by the things he had seen in war.

There were flaws with sentence structure, and in a short story like this, some proofreading couldn't have hurt.

Anyway, despite some flaws, I found it to be quite enjoyable for what it is.

I liked that, it was quite interesting and though some of the choices might be a bit suspect (personally I'd have thought it would have been staying down in the trench rather than standing up and merrily throwing corpses out into no-man's land) but overall this was a well-written and entertaining point of view of a soldier.
There's a few small things I'd suggest, first trench warfare is usually associated with World War 1 so your description puzzled me when talking about trenches in World War 2. Also in places you could have broken up the text into paragraphs a little more to make it easier reading but overall pretty good and I hope you write more :D 4/8

I was skeptical the author could meaningfully write about 'the difficulties a soldier had while fighting the Germans in the trenches' in a story with only a length of 2, and while I don't know if they entirely succeeded there's more content and choices here than expected, and the writing is serviceable.

A few issues with typos, strange word choice, run on sentences and so on that need to be cleaned up--I'm less forgiving of these things in a very short story since it'd be so quick to proofread, and there's an error in the description itself--but all in all this is better than most of the drivel we've gotten lately, and not a bad addition to the Edutainment category. (This should be moved there, by the way. I know you're going for the 'horrors of war' or whatever but this still doesn't count as a horror story.)

Oh, and I kind of question how my character could've realistically had both legs and an arm blown off by a grenade, plus crushed ribs and internal bleeding, and still been carted out of a trench alive, healed up and had the president visit to give him a medal, but I guess I was just that much of a badass.

I love it

yes

so the it go be a ww2 game

IT GOOD

this game shows the hard decisions you would have to make in both world wars. I noticed it was more like WW1. the decisions you had to make had me thinking for a while, I tried to work on saving my soldiers and not getting them injured.

this is going to be crazy

fuck it is not a game

fuck it

I SHOULD HAVE WON THIS SHIT ISNT REALIST.

very epic death

hope is good games

I say to stay away from this due to how realistic it is. No matter what you choose, you lose.

epik

big sigma balls

Horrible, just horrible

BRO THERE IS NO WAY TO WIN THIS

I really like this game

This isn't possible

good

amazing

bad ending

Good game

I liked it, it was for nigers tho

Its a good game but to short.

it gud

You couldve gotten your facts right. World war 2 was not trench warfare. That was world war 1. You need to change the name or change the story if you want it to actually be accurate.

this game is short

this game is awsome

too short of a game

I widdawi hit the gwitti on mega citi

Was Super Stupid and boring.


Waste of Time

died

Trenches are ww1 not ww2

It wasn’t bad

Good, just needs more description

This story had potential. The few grammatical errors this story had didn't detract from the overall experience. I may be in the minority in that I am perfectly willing to overlook a few grammatical errors as long as the story can maintain its immersion. That being said, there wasn't much immersion to be found.

I think the one thing that most authors writing a serious story game (especially one that like this) is ask themselves why the player should care about the character. This can be done in a couple of ways. The first is through developing the character and the second is by investing the player in the game via the story. Will11 does a great job of this with his wild west games, where your character's actions build statistics, relationships, and you feel as if you are building your own career.

I find it hard to be invested in this story for a number of reasons. The first is the most obvious, it's painfully short. The longest paths are no more than 4 choices long. For having such a short path, it is also incredibly linear. While it does admirably capture the difficulties of the soldier, it does not capture their struggle. The soldier is battered with adversity but in only one path does that soldier even get the opportunity to overcome it. Ultimately, we are left with a what appears to be a test run for a story idea. I look forward to seeing your next story improve.

Before I start, I notice that the main characters name was Nicolas, which is also the author's username, so I'm assuming these means we were controlling you? If so, I'd like to apologize now for killing you. You served well.

Onto the review, it was fine, a few grammar mistakes, but nothing that I would hold over your head. It was short and sweet, which I like. Overall, it is what it says it is. You play as a soldier in the trenches, which I appropriate.

From studying World War II, I think you pretty much got the life of a soldier. There are some things you could have added to it but all in all, you got the majority of the facts and information from what I can tell, mind you I am in no way, shape or form an expert in the war but from what my History courses have taught me, it seems accurate.

In summary, you get exactly what you are told, and other than a few mistakes grammar wise, the game was a fun time.

First of all, I liked the concept of the story!
But after a few mins, I noticed there's some situations like this: win or lose (quite a bit too much for me).
Also, there's not much detail at the story, which makes me a bit sad, because you can put some detail and make the story more entreating and have more feeling you are like a solider.
I suggest to put (at least) a good detailed opening, before the war and later put this:"But one day, the red alarm is starting to ring, All the soldiers including me go to the equipment room..." for example.

Overall: I liked this plot, but I think you should edit and add more detail to the story.

My final rating: 3 out of 8.

Sweet medal of honor.

If only there as more...

really bad

Slightly confused story. Trenches were mainly a feature of World War I. Tanks and Panzershreks came later. Not close to reality of war either.

Grammar and spelling is better than most stories on this site so extra marks for that. It just didn't engage me very much

seems more like world war I with all the trenches

I'm pretty critical with others work, but not too hot at it myself. Is there a good ending to this, I went through multiple times, and I always die from sometimes very absurd things. This wasn't that good.
1/8

It was decent fun, but the choices were pretty obvious and this was obscenely short.

Too short, not sure why the maturity level is 6/8.

It's okay

Well. It was a cool premise, and I like to see these kinds of games. But it was really short and had a few punctuation and grammatical errors. I'd like to see some more effort put into your games, but thanks for the game!

Grenades release shrapnel and are primarily used to injure and distract the targets. The killing range isn't very big. They're not bombs or mortars. And jumping on one is as stupid as trying to pick it up and throw it back.