Mitchekie, The Contributor

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Just a gal who loves to write, read, and go on adventures. Never stop exploring!

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Fishing Pulls
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You are the eldest son of Autumnstar, a regal and steadfast Warrior and Leader of the Veliclan (Sandclan) tribe. As Deputy of the tribe, you are next in line to take your father's place as Leader. Your ever-present support is a close friend, Shinepelt, a feline known for her wit, adventurous spirit, and beauty. When terror strikes in the clan and Shinepelt is kidnapped, it is up to you to rescue your friend... or forever live with the knowledge that she has been claimed by the paws of death.

The setting takes place primarily in the Southwestern Region of Sri Lanka, the main locales being the beaches of Weligama, the rainforests of the Sinharaja Forest Reserve, and the Andirilena Caves of Udugama.

The clans include Veliclan (Sandclan) that resides in Weligama, Kandaclan (Mountainclan) that lives in the Sinharaja Forest Reserve, and Galaclan (Stoneclan) that nests in the Andirilena Caves in/near Udugama.

You will be playing as two characters: Sihacaw, a Deputy and the eldest son of AutumnStar, the Leader of Veliclan; and Shinepelt, a female Warrior who also resides in Veliclan.

Several months of work was put into the research for this game alone, learning about the history, culture, language, geography, and flora and fauna of Sri Lanka. Almost every one of the cats' names is a combination of Sinhalese and English, with their names representing and being a description of their appearance and character. For example: Sarpayaatooth, one of the cats' names, is a combination of the word 'sarpayaa' (meaning "snake" in Sinhalese) and the English word 'tooth', so named because he survived a snake bite as a youngster. Every cat has a distinct personality and a unique background, and a fair number of the characters play a part in the story. Additionally, this is primarily a mystery, so pay attention to what's happening and see if you can solve the mystery.

The themes of this story game include mystery, drama, comedy, and romance. Be ye warned: Even small choices you make can have significant consequences, so choose wisely. Your character *can* perish, but it takes many wrong choices for that to occur. Take note that this story game is a long one, so be sure to order at least two pizzas before you sit down and play it, 'cause you're gonna be here for a while. Don't forget the save button; it's there for a reason! Last, but not least, have fun!!

~ This story is dedicated to my boyfriend, a most handsome warrior indeed and one of the bravest and kindest individuals I've ever known. ~


Recent Posts

Hunting for Opinions on 4/12/2016 4:42:37 PM

Ha-ha! Aww. Well, thanks. XD

I try to be kind wherever I go. Granted, I think I'm being a bit too formal on this site, hence it coming across as rather unnerving, apparently. I've certainly made my fair share of mistakes, but I do my best to be loving regardless. :)


Hunting for Opinions on 4/12/2016 4:40:37 PM

Interesting. Never heard of Twine until now, but I'll keep it in consideration. Thanks!


Grammar Check on 4/12/2016 4:38:53 PM

My apologies for popping in and out right quick without giving much advice on grammar improvement, but I just want to say that your story is very lovingly and descriptively written. By all means, keep up the good work!

(From what I could see, everything within the first ten pages seemed to be spelled correctly. The only thing I would suggest is being careful of punctuation usage [i.e., sometimes a colon would have worked better in place of a comma, etc.].)


Hunting for Opinions on 4/12/2016 4:30:40 PM

Hello there,

Thank you so very much for the sweet compliments! It's a shame that many Warrior Cats fans made such a bad name of themselves here on this site. Regarding the ban being lifted in exception for my story: While that would certainly be nice, it seems unlikely at this point. I guess if other WC fans noticed that the ban was lifted for one story there might be complaints, and I don't want the moderators to have to deal with any more trouble. Sounds as if there may be hope in the future for the ban to be lifted eventually, though. Guess we'll just have to wait and see.

Again, thank you so much! Not sure if I'll continue to work on it, but I certainly won't trash it. :)


Hunting for Opinions on 4/11/2016 9:35:03 PM

Thank you so very much! I appreciate you taking a look at it. :)

Unfortunately, that's what the case seems to be. From the sound of it, the ban is staying and will not make exceptions, which is understandable. What will probably happen is that I'll keep this story on the back burner in case the rules are loosened a bit in the future, but stick around to write non-Warrior Cats story-games.

Hmm. Yeah, perhaps. You mean sort of along the lines of having it be a story about cats, but not specifically Warrior Cats? That could actually be done, although I'm concerned that it would still be so close to WC that the fans would find it. If there were no tags on the game, that might help, but it's still a risk.

Ah well. It's all good. I will most likely continue to write here, regardless.


Hunting for Opinions on 4/11/2016 9:30:12 PM

Ha-ha. While I've never actually fraternized with any member of the WC fandom (save for a couple times here on this website, and maybe once or twice on Tumblr), I have read almost all of the books and liked them well enough. But yeah. Thanks for your kind words! I probably will stick around to write some non-Warrior Cats stories.


Hunting for Opinions on 4/11/2016 4:05:15 PM

Ha-ha. Perhaps I'm being a bit too formal.

Indeed, especially after having worked on it for some time.

Ha-ha. Yes. Writing is rewriting! And even when it's done I don't know if any author is ever 100% satisfied with their work.

Many thanks! :)


Let's talk about story structure! on 4/11/2016 4:02:06 PM

Generally, my stories tend to fall into the Three-Act Structure, although they are built more around the characters' personalities than anything. An idea for a character will settle in my head; I'll slowly construct the aspects of that character; and, eventually, a plot will form around them, although it kind of goes back and forth -- coming up with a character and a story for them, forming the story more, adding on character traits to complement or contrast it, etc....

For example:

A young girl, who is a member of a near extinct African tribe, prefers to cut her hair short to balding. Maybe the tribe is completely against this. It's forbidden, but she does it anyway, without any explanation. Why does she do this? Perhaps a tragic past event related to someone she loved has caused her to do so. Why is the tribe so against it? Maybe it signifies rebellion. Okay. So they don't like that. Let's make the girl a generally rebellious character then to greatly contrast the tribe's laws and viewpoints. We could even make her someone who actually prefers to follow the rules, but will disobey this one rule for some reason. She knows the consequences and is afraid for her life, but something else acts as a stronger pull to drive her to rebellion. We should know something more about our character, so let's craft a personality shelf for her. Maybe she only lives with one relative, and her loneliness and isolation at home only fuels her discomfort. Or perhaps it's the opposite? Perhaps she has a large family and has little privacy, which would also fuel her discomfort. Does she have any friends? What are her favorite foods? Are her favorite foods things that the tribe can rarely pilfer/find? What are her greatest fears? What's her biggest accomplishment, if any? What dreams does she have for her life?

We take the character and we build around them and form a structure for both them and the story through a back-and-forth dance. This is generally how I craft my stories, and it takes a long time, but is something that I find fun and effective.

I do agree with Mizal in that the Three-Act Structure and the Hero's Journey, while certainly not the only ways to tell a story (as you've very nicely listed and explained), are so ingrained into the tales we tell that we might be telling one without even realizing it at first. Never heard of Kishotenketsu, by the way. Interesting!


Hunting for Opinions on 4/11/2016 3:33:50 PM

Hello,

Thank you very much for taking a look at my story! I will certainly continue to write more, possibly for this story and certainly for separate, more original works. Interesting proposal: changing the characters from cats to humans. The only issue with this is that, while the story could remain the same, many other aspects would have to be changed. It's a good idea, though.

Whether or not you're a moderator, you are still important and have good advice to give. Thanks! :)


Hunting for Opinions on 4/11/2016 3:31:17 PM

Hello there,

Yeah, that's what it seems like, which is understandable. It's a shame that a vast majority of the fan base seems to put little to no effort into crafting a decent Warrior Cats story(game).