4/1/2023

1/21/2026 6:26 PM

511

2

1 win / 2 losses

Architect

“This is the ending all stories must eventually reach:
silence around an empty stage.”

—Unknown

Lazarus Cage

They want to keep you bound in the dark, but you won't let them. You will get out, fight and flee, fail and die, then try again and again...

Nautilus

Grudges must always be the first to die when a storm arrives.

After years away you return home to your dying father, but will you be able to get your brother to forgive you for leaving? And will you step up to the challenge to inherit your father's most prized possession?

Written as part of the 2023 Spring/Summer Contest: Gone Fishin' it is a game with a much bigger focus on story than gameplay, but still there is a decent amount of endings and variation for something this short.

I did read and review Rogues in 48 hours, and yes I got all the main endings.

On one hand I see that as barely a challenge myself, but then I remember 100k words is most people's yearly reading capacity so could be fun to see that.

Man, am I glad I didn’t miss out on these. To get the whole vote thing out of the way: B pretty much hands down. It’s not that I didn’t like A. On its own it was pretty good, but my notes for it are 5 times as long compared to B. A’s plot is much more expansive in terms of actual content with way more worldbuilding that kept me interested, but also backfired whenever something didn’t fully make sense, especially when the final act moved it into science fantasy. I liked the parallels to the biblical story of Noah with the twist of him embarking on the ark without his family, but at the end it lacked something that would stick with me after finishing the story. Might just be because the actual exodus into the black hole part came a bit out of left field and late into the story, perhaps wasting an opportunity for a more direct clash of ideas. As it is it makes me not like the protagonist and how defeatist he was until the solution was literally handed to him. And in a dream? I kind of want to call this part out, but it’s not actually bad on its own. The issue for me is that if that whole dream scene was placed as the first thing, or very close to the beginning it could open up a whole new dimension to the protagonist and give him an opportunity to be less passive for most of the story without affecting its core. I pretty much went through the entirety of B with a single note that I ended up dismissing a paragraph later since what I thought was a typo wasn’t (Something being a name threw me off for a second). Can’t say it was because I got so engrossed in the story I couldn’t stop reading, but because the story flowed well and its really small scope of pretty much a single conversation between two characters meant there was almost no space to mess up in the first place. There was still quite a bit of depth in the concept itself and even a small moral to the story. Story A was a much more interesting and daring idea, but in this case small and safe ended up paying off I guess.

Well it was more in reference to being the 4th to arrive in the same way as a certain horsemen from that one obscure book nobody read does. Don't worry the duty won't be grim to me, quite the opposite actually ;-)

Welcome to the site. CYS exists purely as a website so there's no way to access any storygames offline or to download them for later. The save option exists as a way to save progress so that you can close the game and later return to it without having to play through the beginning again. It is quite useful for longer stories or if you read on a few different devices, but you still an active connection to read.

And as the fourth he rode in on a pale horse, ready to fulfill his grim duty.

I mean unless I remember the definition wrong awareness isn't required to consititude rape since it's about the general lack of consent. So deserved or not it is still technically rape.

Finally, some justice for the Abyssal Rape Scorpions.

1. Backgrounds (and anything else visual) you can handle by using HTML and CSS: https://www.w3schools.com/htmL/html_images_background.asp https://www.w3schools.com/css/css_background.asp With RTE disabled all you need to do is paste html code into the text box to style things. 2. A way that wouldn't involve excessive programming skills would be to randomize a variable using the editor's random function and then create multiple connections to all the pages you want to the randomizer to pick from and set link restrictions so that only of them is visible at a time based on the random variable set earlier. If you name them all the same then from the reader's it would look like it's a single link that sends them to a random page. https://chooseyourstory.com/help/articles/article.aspx?ArticleId=14 If you need me to elaborate or provide some examples hit me up on discord or something.

I wouldn't say no to some free points. Can't have them being wasted on Wardens of all people. Alternatively send them to Liminal since he's been directed draw me from what I've seen.