4 Little Mice

a Everything Else by AppDude27 and TerrAquVen

Commended by BerkaZerka on 9/21/2019 9:15:31 AM

Player Rating6.29/8

"#45 overall, #8 for 2015"
based on 540 ratings since 04/24/2017
played 3,983 times (finished 300)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

Four little mice went to search for some cheese, one got trapped, and then there were three.

Three little mice were playing with glue, one got a little too sticky, and then there were two.

Two little mice were on the run. Kitty wouldn't play nice, so then there was one.

One little mouse left all alone. He choked himself, and then there were none.

4 Little Mice is a Choose Your Own Adventure Poem that I wrote over the course of several weeks. The story tells a tale of love, companionship, sacrifice, and more. 

Storygame Features:

-Based on Agatha Christie's "And Then There Were None", but with a furry little twist!

-The butterfly effect has never been more important! Each and every choice you make could have drastic consequences!

-With over 10+ endings, you'll definitely be coming back for more.

Updates:
-Fixed a bug that brought certain mice back to life.
-Fixed a bug that prevented player from progressing. (Special thanks to Will11 and 
Plaacchei.)
 

Player Comments

HAHAHA DIE, MICE!

Four Little Mice was one of the stories I remember enjoying when I first found CYS years ago. So I decided to read it again to see how it held up through time and to get it rated by me.
To start off, I am not sure why it is noted in blue on the first page that important choices are blue and ought not be missed. The reader has to make a choice or click whatever non-choice link is provided to go on to the next page. It seriously brought me out of the story to have sudden, blue IMPORTANT CHOICE notices. I can read what the choices are without them being noted that they are blue and important. Don’t worry. I won’t miss them. I managed to reach this story; I think I can manage to figure out that I need to click a link.

The story itself was quite charming. The poem style it was written in reminded me of a children’s book, which was a good decision on the part of the author, considering that most animal stories not meant for children are for degenerates. It was quite confusing for the older brother mouse to be named Pa. I am guessing there is some meaning behind the mice’s names, but it never felt right to me reading the other mice referred to as Pa’s siblings.
I was sad when Paul the Exterminator died. He was a hero who did not deserve that. I only hope that someone else took up his mantle in the war against the thieving rodent pests.

As for the story structure, there were a lot of delayed effects, which some people really like, but it was a little tedious for me to have to read the same pages a dozen times in order to find all the endings. There is also a bit where Ru is said to be meeting up with Li and Mo in a path where they never were separated from one another, which is confusing. If you freak who reads comments before you read stories are into delayed branching, this one’s for you, baby.

It is always nice to see a story on here that is both kid-friendly and entertaining. While subsequent playthroughs grew increasingly boring, the first few were very fun for me. I’d recommend just replaying until you end up with all the mice alive (or dead, if that’s your goal) and quitting there until another time.

RIP Paul
-- Cricket on 6/1/2019 10:40:15 PM with a score of 2
"4 Little Mice" was an adorable, warm game that immediately captured my heart and attention. Written in a poem format, it sounded similar to a children's story and reminded me of the popular nursery rhyme "Three Blind Mice", only this story had a modern, slightly macabre twist. The game offered a variety of different scenes and endings that were all fun to discover, and I admit that I purposely chose the paths that would kill the mice, just so I could see what inventive deaths that were laid out for them. The cast of characters were all endearing, each having their own unique abilities and personalities that made them stand out. It saddened each time I failed to save a mouse, which pushed me to replay the game so that I could help the entire family escape. It was surprising that giving the needle to the foolish mouse would save one of the siblings, and it warmed my heart to see that the mouse who appeared "useless" turned out to be a hero.

Overall, "4 Little Mice" successfully grabbed my interest with its endearing story and multiple endings, and it left me smiling at the end. It definitely wouldn't be an appropriate game for younger kids, despite the cheerful tone the narrator adapted throughout the story (which somehow made the death scenes even scarier). I'm glad that I chose to play this game and would definitely recommend it for those who love cute stories and adorable mice.
-- SummerSparrow on 4/11/2016 4:27:21 PM with a score of 4
that is a good game i got the ru,mo,pa ending.HOW TO KEEP LI ALIVE!!!!!!
-- Kylo on 4/9/2020 9:10:02 PM with a score of 1
wow great game this is worth playing
-- Kylo on 4/9/2020 8:53:11 PM with a score of 3
It was a pretty good story in verse and had good twists for each mouse. This was a good spin on the mice tale.
-- PilotThrone on 3/30/2020 6:19:55 PM with a score of 1
good
-- Blem on 2/14/2020 10:23:02 AM with a score of 4
i really was not emotionally prepared for the death of my mice. i think the weight of their furry lifeless bodies will forever weigh down on my conscience.
-- flo on 1/24/2020 7:29:59 AM with a score of 2
Well, this was an extremely heartwarming story. It was very interactive, and figuring out how to solve all four mice was a fun little puzzle. Initially, some choices that you thought were right (for they might save one mouse's life) may turn out to be the wrong ones, for they force another mouse to die. In my first playthrough, only two of the mice survived, but I managed to keep all three alive by the third.

Your use of items and the butterfly effect was clever. I especially liked how you wrote important choices in blue. It was also really fun to be able to play from the perspective of all four characters. The bond between the family members was obvious, and I really did care for the characters. This prompted me to seek the true end of your game. Good job at evoking emotion in the reader, like this.

The rhyming scheme of your game was good. I know it can be difficult to write longer pieces -- especially interactive ones! -- in this sort of format. Although this would be a difficult goal, my one recommendation for improvement would be that you had some sort of syllable pattern that you were consistent with. E.g. Line 1 has X syllables, Line 2 has Y, and then Line 3 has X and Line 4 has Y, again. This would've helped the poem to flow, better. I also saw a few instances where the words on adjacent lines didn't really seem to rhyme, perfectly. I understand how difficult this can be, however, when you have poems spanning over 12,000 words.

Tl;dr : This is a short, heartwarming story about saving a family of four mice. It is interactive, clever, and overall just a well-done piece of fiction. Good work.
-- Reader82 on 1/16/2020 9:21:13 PM with a score of 4
I got the Pa ending, noice.
-- D~O~U~B~T on 12/24/2019 12:54:49 PM with a score of 1
I KILLED PAUL! MY LIFE IS COMPLETE!
-- ArtsyGirl38 on 11/14/2019 9:56:47 AM with a score of 0
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