"Too few ratings to be ranked"
played times (finished )
"run through the jungle"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
A letter...a game....a lifestyle
Delete the introduction (that was random);
Capitalize words correctly;
Break down large paragraphs;
Make some conflict;
Make choices logical (unless you had wanted to emphasis the humor of it);
Make it more humorous (because I didn't find it very funny)).
Writing skills (very nice writing ability).
on 12/11/2016 11:40:34 AM
What... what was day ending, do? Larb
-- Tarbo134 on 7/13/2017 1:15:49 AM
Sorry. Not much to the story. It didn't grab my attention and take me away. When I read something, the best way to get a good rating from me is to take me to " Readerland", make me smile/laugh/cry. I was stuck in reality. Thank you for trying. :)
on 1/23/2017 2:40:49 PM
Yes! Loved it
on 10/25/2016 3:40:01 PM
It could have been longer
on 11/7/2015 7:38:40 AM
Eh, this was wierd
on 9/8/2015 1:52:41 PM
Eh..Short, but okay. There's not enough ways to go yet.
on 7/11/2015 7:18:21 PM
To quote Chris and TheDickReviewer, at least it ain't warrior cats.
on 4/28/2015 7:22:03 PM
Choose your own BORDOM! I give this game a 1/8. Uhhh..... it's alright. I guess. I won Christmas, so it can't be THAT bad. It's pretty much impossible to loose.
-- Pinkiepie4449 on 4/2/2015 10:42:45 AM
To quote Chris, at least it's not warriors.
on 12/16/2014 7:06:59 PM
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