A Pixie Danced

Player Rating5.44/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 11 ratings since 11/22/2019
played 117 times (finished 12)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length6/8

"It'll be a while, better grab a Snickers®"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

This story is not about you. It is about a cast of fantastical characters - faeries, a goddess, and a few who can be categoried as vaguely human - whose stories you will be able to explore and, to a necessarily limited extent, change. Every choice will generally lead down a different route, however slight, so I highly encourage you to fully explore the game's choices. The story certainly comes together much more clearly as you explore different branches, though I doubt you will be left overly confused if you choose to explore only one branch. I readily welcome feedback and suggestions on how the game can be improved, recognise that it is lacking in many ways, and will be happy to edit and expand the game as and when I receive constructive feedback. As it stands, however, the game is complete.

This storygame owes a considerable amount to the inspiring Divinus community over at RPGuild. One of its main storylines is based on a series of collaborative posts written by myself and Lord Zee. I am incredibly grateful to him for permitting me to adapt it into this storygame. I am also incredibly grateful to Antarctic Termite for running the iteration of Divinus from which part of this game is adapted. I would also like to thank all those who have contributed to Divinus over the years and continue to do so.

I am grateful to the chooseyourstory community for making this possible and for making me feel very welcome. I must also acknowledge my indebtedness to EndMaster, whose storygames inspired me to pursue this mode of writing.

Player Comments

Everything I say in this review should be regarded with this disclaimer: I am 100% positive that I'm not the intended audience for this storygame. It is quite possible that devotees of the fantasy genre will find it to be absolutely engaging, but I am clearly not that person.

From what I could see scanning through the text, the writing looked solid from a technical perspective. Sentences were competently constructed, and words were spelled in a recognizable way.

But I was turned off by this aspect of the story's description: "This story is not about you. It is about a cast of fantastical characters - faeries, a goddess, and a few who can be [categorized] as vaguely human."

The problem with this type of story -- to me -- is that if the entire cast of characters is inhuman, then I will have no ability to relate with any of them. And as tends to be the case, the behavior of the characters can all be broadly painted by race: fairies all behave the same way, elves all behave the same way, pixies all behave the same way, gods all behave the same way, and so forth. As soon as a character's race is identified, you can predict what he or she is going to do.

And "gods" in particular can be troublesome characters, because they all stand for a single trait, and therefore by definition have a one-dimensional set of motivations. And in "A Pixie Danced," this card is played right away:

<<“Go,” he commanded his other monsters, “and bring them all to me to be marred!” Because that is what anyone whose name is quite literally Mar does.>>

Hypothetically speaking, when you have a God of Fire and a God of Water, you know without having to think too hard that one burns and the other is wet; in a contest of strength it's a foregone conclusion that one is either going to get boiled or the other one is going to get doused. There is inherently no suspense in the interaction, because the "characters" are incapable of any other outcome.

I only mention this in the context of a storygame review because I found myself incapable of maintaining interest through the first couple pages of "A Pixie Danced." All the talk of fantastical creatures begetting each other made me think that I was being asked to learn the creation myths of some pagan culture -- except that as advertised, there is no human connection to this story.

And as a result, I had no connection either. Reading about the story of, say, Saturn devouring his children can be interesting because of what is also says about the Greco-Roman worldview. But "A Pixie Danced" seems to be a work of sheer mythology, completely detached from a world I can recognized, and it was asking me to take a journey I found no compelling reason to take.

I rated this a 5/8 just for the obvious writing competency, but this is not a story that held my interest for more than a few paragraphs. But if others think more highly of the story, I will happily defer to their opinion.
-- Bill_Ingersoll on 12/7/2019 11:58:56 AM with a score of 0
First, take my opinion with a grain of salt. This is part of one of the genres I directly hate. It is really well written and the really few choices lead to different paths with well-thought lore. My main criticism is really slow-paced and with few really interactive content in pages really big and dense.

Still, I recognize is quality, even if is not for me.
-- poison_mara on 12/5/2019 11:26:26 PM with a score of 0
Beautiful work.
-- Rowan on 11/22/2019 12:16:28 PM with a score of 0
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