A Story of Love, Death, and Eggs

Player Rating3.39/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 26 ratings since 01/17/2019
played 169 times (finished 36)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

Tags

Humor

Just a small adventure that questions morals and why you make the choices you do.

The main goal is to get to some eggs, in any way possible.

Terribly silly things will plague your short journey, so watch out!

(And yes, this story game is pretty crazy and was made for one of my classes.)

Player Comments

Amazing. The eggs have blessed me. Amen. I only worship eggs now.
-- Dogwhispered on 2/16/2019 7:48:40 PM with a score of 0
Well, like those little self-made games that killed five minutes in a fun and entertaining way: it was random but not so random as to lose the thread of the bizarre storyline (I don't think since Dr Eggman from Sonic the Hedgehog I can remember a more egg-obsessed character).

The grammar was good but there were a few minor typos, you wrote "board" instead of "bored" and referred to a Cake Aisle as a Cake Isle (which does admittedly sound more fun). There were some interestingly creative lines (the phrase "making is squack in pain as it poofs into a raw chicken" struck me as particularly imaginative) and it was a nice example of Literary Nonsense of the sort of Alice in Wonderland variety.

I think if you kept writing and applied yourself to producing a more traditional choose your own adventure your creativity could take it down some rather fun paths, perhaps branching out into several fun storylines such as the egg one. Not too bad and better than a lot of other random-lol stories out there, 3/8
-- Will11 on 2/15/2019 12:10:30 AM with a score of 0
So I chose to give this storygame a chance just based off of the pure, sheer amusement I got from just looking at the title. It is mildly funny, I’ll give you that, especially for this storygame (since its the kind of storygame that sort of is the random-ness, noneness-full genre). It’s written with good grammar though I would have loved to not be able to fall out the window endlessly in a loop instead of being forced to pick the right option. Overall, this would have been cool if written with more detail, but it’s decent for the genre you picked it for.

P.S. I don’t like raw cookie dough.
-- At_Your_Throat on 2/6/2019 11:39:01 PM with a score of 0
I enjoyed this storygame. It was a little nonsensical and silly, but I imagine that was the point of the game. The pacing was a little quick for such a silly storygame, but it was still well done. I liked how you gave the different endings a very distinct feeling and flair. It gave me as a reader a different sense of accomplishment and I did feel rewarded.

It was very short and thus the experience was short so that would have to factor in. I think if you expanded on it, you could add some more exploration of the building you were trapped in and you could slowly piece together your mission from various clues. Maybe a few more challenges along the way to the eggs.

All things considered, it was a very short and enjoyable game. Aside from a couple spelling and grammar errors, it was well done. Keep up the good work!
-- Tyrannosaurusrex on 2/1/2019 10:52:18 PM with a score of 0
Very funny and quite entertaining.
-- Reader on 1/23/2019 12:21:29 PM with a score of 0
This was a fun little story game. It was random but there were parts that were funny. I bet you'll get a good grade for your class.
-- Faervel on 1/22/2019 5:00:30 PM with a score of 0
When you die due to trying to pet the puppy, you should add a ¨End game¨ along with the other choice. Forced loops can get a bit annoying.
Love the story overall.
-- asherch314 on 1/21/2019 9:10:52 AM with a score of 0
Slow claps
-- corgi213 on 1/19/2019 6:10:42 PM with a score of 0
Despite being deliberately random and nonsensical (thus making the actual plot take second place) this is a nice little storygame, not bad for being your first.

It was very simply structured and had only two (very similar) epilogues, but I didn't find evident writing errors and some passages managed to be somewhat funny.

In the end it was a good first test on storygame structure. You seemed to handle a simple story well enough so keep writing, I'm curious to see what you're capable of.
-- undr on 1/19/2019 6:56:16 AM with a score of 0
This made me a little board. Very boaring.
-- Austinc on 1/18/2019 11:50:16 PM with a score of 0
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