A Story of Love, Death, and Eggs

Player Rating3.33/8

"#642 overall, #10 for 2019"
based on 63 ratings since 01/17/2019
played 469 times (finished 76)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

Tags

Humor

Just a small adventure that questions morals and why you make the choices you do.

The main goal is to get to some eggs, in any way possible.

Terribly silly things will plague your short journey, so watch out!

(And yes, this story game is pretty crazy and was made for one of my classes.)

Player Comments

I am guessing by the description that this is the classic lolrandom story. These kinds of stories can be fun because they have no limits. The story can go anywhere at any time for any, or no reason. This can be entertaining, but if done poorly, can simply be boring and annoying. It can be difficult to write the lolrandom, but the CYOA setting is the place for it. And I do like eggs.

The story has an interesting setup, but could have a bit more. If I’m waking up in a dimly lit room, I’m going to look around the room in detail. Descriptions here could include more about the room. How big is it? Is it clean or dirty? Is the floor wooden or covered with carpet? Is there furniture in it? Are there any eggshells? Does the window have a curtain? Many more details just on that first page could really expand the story and get the reader more into the story itself.

I like that the puppy gave me another chance. That’s the kind of lolrandom that can really be fun and silly at the same time. If you really wanted to expand this story, you could use variables to track how many times the reader selected that option and really only give them one more chance – so if they made the same selections a second time, they would get a different result!

The pages overall are a little short and really could benefit from more details throughout. While I realize you were going for the short, random, silly story, that can still be done with detailed descriptions. I liked the story overall, it did a nice job of lolrandom. I’d love to see the author complete a more detailed story that still doesn’t have to be serious, but could be more complete. Thank you for sharing!
-- Ogre11 on 1/7/2020 1:14:36 PM with a score of 0
It is litterally a story about someone trying to get eggs. I honestly wasn't expecting that.
-- ral on 10/14/2019 8:04:54 PM with a score of 0
How is it love?
-- StupidManatee on 8/7/2019 4:55:51 PM with a score of 0
Haha very ?? funny
-- DUDE_MAN on 6/26/2019 8:47:44 AM with a score of 0
Plot twist... You are the Easter Bunny! ^_^
-- Avery_Moore on 4/13/2019 5:56:52 PM with a score of 0
Cute little adventure. Really wish I could have pet that dog :)
-- Rivertail on 3/26/2019 12:17:52 PM with a score of 0
That...was beautiful. Truly amazing.

Anyways, I didn't notice any grammar mistakes or storyline mistakes. It was funny. Too many fourth wall breaks for me though. Do you know how expensive it is the rebuild the fourth wall? A lot of money.
-- Benajah765 on 3/19/2019 11:06:36 AM with a score of 0
This game is very ridiculous, but was able to provide me sheer entertainment the entire way through. Great job
-- Llewxam on 3/11/2019 5:36:16 PM with a score of 0
I enjoyed the story, although it was kind of short. I didn't notice many spelling mistakes. That was one doozy of a ride though.
-- Unkindcrab on 3/6/2019 4:43:51 PM with a score of 0
Entertaining to say at least. Funny, but lacking in ambition.
-- Dilatory on 3/6/2019 3:25:05 AM with a score of 0
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